Comments by Dilated View
- "Oh wow I really really enjoyed this. It struck all the right nerves and that last stanza really left me pondering "what comes next?" When it's "night forever" and the world is no longer your oyster, who will create a spark to see what comes? Very nicely done throughout, thank you for sharing!"
Posted by Dilated View on "Where are we?" by Jonas Robinson
- "I found this interesting as a sort of back and forth between love and death. The analogies throughout helped keep the flow going in a way that kept me off balance but on track from line to line. Really cool imagery :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Burn Burn Burn" by Jonas Robinson
- "Really interesting concept you've written about here. The years fly by and our presence here isn't even a blip. The idea of living on through the collective memory really struck a chord; not just "will we be remembered" but also "how will we be remembered" which always makes me try to be a better person (at least while I'm here). And the idea that we are unconsciously/subconsciously focused on making the most of our time here, knowing that we will end up back in an abyss waiting to end up back here for another blip is interesting. I wonder if that is why we dream? Anyway, very cool write, thanks for sharing :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "The Abyss" by Sorrowful Jester
- "Man.... I can relate to this in so many ways, and my wife even more so. There's only so many hours in a day and little ones are rambunctious as hell and, despite loving them so much that it makes your heart burst when you think about it, we have a glass that starts overflowing and is never empty and the downtime is just pure mental and physical exhaustion sometimes. I see parents out and about with their 5+ kids and they're all listening and they're all being calm and I'm like "man what drugs are those kids on??" As for the write itself your descriptions were spot on and sad. Keep trucking along, it isn't like you have a choice ;) Find somewhere you want to be, plot out the steps you need ot take to get there, and even if it's a long term plan with lots of barriers in the way, work toward you getting there with your little ones. Make that part of your life all about YOU and don't ever let go. Thank you for sharing, I hope you have the energy to read this! ;)"
Posted by Dilated View on "Blurry Perceptions" by felicity0444
- "The back and forth imagery really worked well here. This left me wondering if it was a real person or a schizophrenic play pal, and the way you formatted this makes me wonder if that was the point. The flow kept me going from line to line with curiosity. Nicely done, write on! :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "The Nameless One" by Sorrowful Jester
- "I think this is something we can all relate to but the visuals you used made for a very sad and beautiful take on it. Really well done and much enjoyed, thank you for sharing, I hope you find your sunset :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "A Purpose of Nothing" by felicity0444
- "You painted a really bleak landscape and asked some interesting questions throughout. The visuals you used I felt really worked well, I could feel myself shivering . That slow death despite the struggle. I can feel this as literal and metaphor and thought in both senses it resonated. Thank you for sharing :)"
Posted by Dilated View on "The stars have abandonned us" by Alectozere
- ""Fire emblem,My pen:Write thrice...Once to blame, Twice to fight, Last, to incite." Loved these lines. The whole piece was really well put together and felt very powerful. Loved it."
Posted by Dilated View on "We Shall Not Be Victims" by Tagen
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