Comments by The Zebra Warrior
- "I feel many connections with this...it dripped in human poignancy, as if the narrator knows the answer but is somehow hoping against or idling the time trying to make sense of the dream condition. You controlled the language better in my opinion than some of your older writes, where you might have slightly repeated yourself, but I think we can all do that, because we have familiar themes we want to write about. The tone of this might be similiar, but the actual poem itself is very wellw rought from being to end with some unique and excellent similes and metaphorical imaginings mixed with the reality. All a dream...yet a fine example of accessible poetry without being compromised or diluted for the appeal of the 'masses'...very well done"
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "when ten is twelve." by Six-Out
- "some incredible delicate hallucinatory imagery is swept over here a kind of ethereal feeling quite rare in a poem from a man, obviously not afraid to display some unique and expertly crafted words witha wistful yearning.Excellent."
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "beautiful monsters [of elegant kisses]" by Six-Out
