Comments by All Members
- "I like this one. Like several poets have pointed out, the topic is a bit juvinelle. But you managed to execute this one quite nicely, fining your own voice to it. Excellent work."
Posted by Unknown on "Another Day In Hell" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "it was kindof a weird coincidence i was sittin in home room and my friend was tellin gme about her aunt and i kind of wrote it for her..."
Posted by HaUnTed_sOuL on "Last Fix" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "u like it huh? well i think it needs more but i do like how it is right now...just needs a lil tweakin ya know?
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Posted by HaUnTed_sOuL on "Untitled" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "I want to point you at a work by silentstalker called "Punishment," as an example of how far I think you could go with this."
Posted by Liz on "Untitled" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "I think this work is undeveloped. You've got a great start and a lot of emotion to work in, but I think it ends too soon and says too little. "
Posted by Liz on "Untitled" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "While this poem contains some subject matter very common on DP, it goes beyond the simple rant of a frustrated teen. You have a lot of control on your beats, and the rhyme is great. Much smarter than the average "haunted soul.""
Posted by Liz on ""Deep Inside"" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "Yeah, that's is. This is very strong, very subtle, very confident. Great write. You don't kill us with the message, you let us find it."
Posted by Liz on "Last Fix" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "I enjoyed it
you have great talent...
as for not bein original..it doesnt matter shes just expressing what she feels
anyways , haunted i think you're great, keep writing and i'll keep reading."
Posted by lost_moody_soul on ""Dad"" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "and the reason she OFFERS her opinion is to expand one's horizons, and perhaps give them a different veiw and maybe even help their style...if you can't handle that, then maybe DP isn't for you..."
Posted by Malice In Wonderland on "Another Day In Hell" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "and liz,you are a stupid bitch! nobody cares what youd ''love to see''!i think she writes pretty fucken well and if you dont like her work then quit taking time to read and fucken critisize them!"
Posted by Unknown on "Another Day In Hell" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "Oh dear!! I can relate to this. I went through a time like this a few years ago. It will all pass eventually.~Atalanta"
Posted by Atalanta on ""Dad"" by HaUnTed_sOuL
- "You have done a great job in venting what haunts you. If you feel it, and can write it down, that's what it's meant for. This is your way to cope with your feelings. Don't compromise it."
Posted by Stormcomin on ""Dad"" by HaUnTed_sOuL
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