Another Day In Hell

By HaUnTed_sOuL


Wandering these lonely hallways,
You all just walk by and stare.
Is it my attitude that turns you away?
Or is it the color of my hair?

Is it all the jewelry and black I wear?
Or is it the cold look that I give?
Maybe its the fact I'd rather die,
than to just invisibly live.

Is it because I don't give a shit,
about you or how you feel?
Or maybe because I get my nightmares
mixed up with what is real.

That's it, I figured it out,
I know why you can't get through.
It's the fact you know SHIT about me,
And I'll never want you to.

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Copyright 2004 HaUnTed_sOuL
Published on Friday, November 12, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I like this one. Like several poets have pointed out, the topic is a bit juvinelle. But you managed to execute this one quite nicely, fining your own voice to it. Excellent work.

  • HaUnTed_sOuL On Monday, December 6, 2004, HaUnTed_sOuL (18)By person wrote:

    well thanks it seems like its kkinda too juvinile for my taste now but i still like lol thanks :P

  • knightmirror On Thursday, December 2, 2004, knightmirror (426)By person wrote:

    nice write.....i know this feeling all to well....but...i couldn't have expressed it like you did....thanks for sharing and welcome to dp....-knight

  • Malice In Wonderland On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (976)By person wrote:

    by the way...This poem, I think we can all relate to somehow...however, it just lacks a certain orginality...it's a good start though... Kya Scholar

  • A former member wrote: and liz,you are a stupid bitch! nobody cares what youd ''love to see''!i think she writes pretty fucken well and if you dont like her work then quit taking time to read and fucken critisize them! Scholar

  • HaUnTed_sOuL On Monday, November 22, 2004, HaUnTed_sOuL (18)By person wrote:

    look dont say that kind of thing liz is trying to help me out and helping me expand my writing plz dont critisize her

  • Malice In Wonderland On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (976)By person wrote:

    look, you have *NO* right to haul off and call Liz a bitch, she has the right ot express her opinion...just like you, Scholar

  • Malice In Wonderland On Saturday, November 20, 2004, Malice In Wonderland (976)By person wrote:

    and the reason she OFFERS her opinion is to expand one's horizons, and perhaps give them a different veiw and maybe even help their style...if you can't handle that, then maybe DP isn't for you... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: this is great also! you must keep writing, i love your work Scholar

  • Stormcomin On Tuesday, November 16, 2004, Stormcomin (32)By person wrote:

    A great write with very visual meaning. Good job.

  • HaUnTed_sOuL On Thursday, November 18, 2004, HaUnTed_sOuL (18)By person wrote:

    thank you:)

  • A former member wrote: This sends me back to my highschool days, i can remember feeling like this. well expressed. welcome to DP :)

  • HaUnTed_sOuL On Thursday, November 18, 2004, HaUnTed_sOuL (18)By person wrote:

    Yeah it was one of those days where everything gets overwhelming and u have to let it out somehow. thats usually when I write most.

  • A former member wrote: You have executed the exquisite feelings of the heart marvellously. I've often wanted to say something like this but I can't . . and through so few verses you have conveyed the feeling that brushes past us all. A great write, Amanda ~ Rose.

  • HaUnTed_sOuL On Tuesday, November 16, 2004, HaUnTed_sOuL (18)By person wrote:

    Thank you very much Rose. That was one of my really early poems I just wanted to share with those I thought might be wanting to say the same thing. Thanks~Amanda~

  • Liz On Saturday, November 13, 2004, Liz (265)By person wrote:

    It's always great to see new writers. Pissed off high school goth poetry, not so much. I'd really love it if you wrote something a little more original, something to showcase your diverse skills. It's obvious you can write, now show us how well.

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