Comments by All Members
- "very cool i especially like the ending and use of great simple words like that to convey a message, nice job ~finaldestiny~"
Posted by finaldestiny on "paper cut" by Invader Lyn
- "ooo good write, purple -"smile so hard i cry".. i def can relate to that. the first stanza, the emotions build up and then it ends with "i'd still be alone", sigh..the sadness.. and i absolutely adore the last two stanzas !! --limey"
Posted by sulkylime on "paper cut" by Invader Lyn
- "i thoroughly enjoyed this.the ending is spectacular.not that the rest isn't.*pulls dirty sock out of mouth*.knight"
Posted by knightmirror on "paper cut" by Invader Lyn
- "i love how it eases in at the start "ask for a day
if I want an hour
believe in a lie
if it seems comforting" then drags you through the inner turmiol.. and finally i felt a little magic at the end in the last 2 stanzas... those really did something"
Posted by Daemonicus on "paper cut" by Invader Lyn
- "welcome back!!! This is wonderful...captivating words, expressed so elegantly. I love "you cry, I laugh
I feel, you joke
I see, you fake
you die, I blank". This has a fabulous flow too. Fox
"
Posted by flying_fox on "paper cut" by Invader Lyn
- "Wow.. I had the same feeling.. like I was the person or an onlooker in this hospital... I read it like 5 times and it's just so good! Nice work!"
Posted by Unknown on "of the unknown" by Invader Lyn
- "I agree with Prophet. This has amazing flow. Your just a great writer. This proves it even more so. "
Posted by Drea on "Beauty" by Invader Lyn
- ""musical notes laced with soft flames
tells of a story with an abundance of names", absolutely gorgeous. ~L
"
Posted by Lynaes on "Beauty" by Invader Lyn
- ""Twelve steps taken to forget".. And trying move on and put it all behind you, I felt. I felt strangely involved in this piece as I read it, it just draws you right in to it's core. Lovely work. ~L"
Posted by Lynaes on "of the unknown" by Invader Lyn
- "i know i cant totally see where you coming from. with such little words the meaning in this blew me off my feet. f-cking awesome."
Posted by Twilight on "Relationship" by Invader Lyn
- "oooooo you know i have always loved this one...to be oblivious waiting for life altering results. th epounding in your chest. the eating at the bottom of your stomach plaguing you day and night. you put this quite well stellar."
Posted by Twilight on "of the unknown" by Invader Lyn
- ""a door found too stubborn is finally shattered
the remnants of doubt left trampled and tattered " a beautiful statement full of imagery and emotion discovered on new ground...well done stellar:)"
Posted by Twilight on "Beauty" by Invader Lyn
- "B.E.A Utiful flow. Rhyme again well doen, the story touching, with a nice paced progression. +T.P.U+"
Posted by Unknown on "Beauty" by Invader Lyn
- "I agree with tim, although this is my first time reading it...Well I guess that's not really agreeing with tim...Anyways the flow and rhyme are wonderfully executed, I really enjoyed the last stanza. +T.P.U+"
Posted by Unknown on "of the unknown" by Invader Lyn
- "I love condensed poetry when it is done well. This was excellent. The length only gives substance to the title and how long a bad relationship can last. A great point written wonderfully. Well done."
Posted by Alanarchy on "Relationship" by Invader Lyn
- "relationship BAW! What's the point they always end the sam...oops sorry lol So short, to the point, no bullshitting. *Fav*"
Posted by Drea on "Relationship" by Invader Lyn
- "damn it Stellar, I'm glad your back. I missed ya. The flow is awesome. Your work is welcomed back with open arms."
Posted by Drea on "of the unknown" by Invader Lyn
- "_god...i feel like i'm reading this for the first time...fuck...i'm speechless,as if for the first time.welcome to dp,stranger...stay a while.-tim"
Posted by suicideseason on "of the unknown" by Invader Lyn
