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- "short, to the point and a history of the heart repeating itself. . they only blur when we're ready for it... no drink needed... better yet... just let the image be and use it as a reminder of lessons learned."
Posted by NikesRain on "fabricated." by eidos
- "Wondering if that waking up would be alone, or possibly with a two-bagger sharing your bed? But then I think Dybbuk gave it away maybe, cheers!"
Posted by dwells on "fabricated." by eidos
- "oh, and there are no panties dropping or crass sexual phrases like 'sucking cock' or 'fucking a pussy', which are always the mark of excellent erotica, and you should really include a picture, maybe, from somewhere else without giving credit to whomever produced it... then, this would be great, but only Amazing if you CaPiTaLiZeD every other letter. ok, I'm done, thanks.:)"
Posted by The Dybbuk on "fabricated." by eidos
- "this lacks an obvious rhyme scheme that sounds like a children's book written by Seuss... and it should be more literal, really, so the meaning is not inferred from the work but simply stated within. I shouldn't have to think about why one wants the image to be blurred, just tell me outright that the memory is painful. I mean, why beat around the bush...shit. I used a figure of speech. The first two lines should end in rhyme, then the second two... so, you have to add one more line... I'm sorry. I just thought I'd let you know, you're not following the recipe for dp success. *shakes head* tsk tsk. On the other hand, I think I have tasted that drink several nights over. thanks."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "fabricated." by eidos
- ""this morning we eat breakfast as strangers" - I liked this contrast to "forever". I can feel where you are coming from in this one, and I loved the structure and flow. Great job! Ciao, T/S"
Posted by TropicalSnowstorm on "the sound of standing still." by eidos
- "much liked! i get this so much, like part of you wants to be with them, but commonsense tries to override by letting you know they are not for you. thanks for sharing."
Posted by natalie on "the sound of standing still." by eidos
- "sounds like context is your friend, maybe? Or rather, the persona's above... I know it's conventional, here, to read poetry as if it were always the honest to god's truth about the writer or something, but um... isn't the context similar between the two scenarios above? I mean, it seems as if the definition of 'sinner' ends up being similar... since the saint takes a wrong turn... now if the saint had taken the right turn, then it would be hard to understand how this could be mistaken as a sinner without changing the definition.... maybe, just some thoughts.. murmurs in the dark, as I call them. and all the sinners saints. But then, I guess, definitions could always be contextual, maybe... and that would bring back the friendliness of the context that brings the saintly rather than the sinful... ok, enough rambling..... thanks for the thoughts."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "context isn't a friend." by eidos
- "I've been reading through your works...they feel like flash cards, about life, and loss, and heart (or lack of it). It's brilliant. Thank you."
Posted by Unknown on "the years between." by eidos
- "Time does fly when you're having fun and crawls when you're not. Time traveling back to a time we enjoyed is one of life's little pleasures, however there is a cost of losing the time and experience of now. Relaying sentiment however is never a waste of anyone's time - XXOO"
Posted by Nehema on "the years between." by eidos
- "Such a clever reflection. People give is happiness occasionally, but the disappointment and loss that can follow is usually what I want to forget... This was a very interesting piece with a title that suited it exactly :) Good work!"
Posted by Unknown on "the understanding of time travel" by eidos
- "Simply put: that secondhand breaking and falling, getting stuck in the glass of the clock, crawling with sneaky bugs that got in but cant get out.... stops everything that was and eliminate futures. I feel ya."
Posted by Poetic-Realm on "the years between." by eidos
- "so concise yet holding a mountain of emotions that floods the heart and catches the breath.... perfect"
Posted by NikesRain on "five a.m." by eidos
- "Being able to sleep in freedom only to wake up to be reminded... - XXOO"
Posted by Nehema on "five a.m." by eidos
- "It's 4am and I was on my way to bed... but logged in, because I wanted to comment on this.
Indeed, this can be seen from two angles.
On the one hand, unrequited love is painful, to both sides (http://familymatters.vision.org/FamilyMatters/bid/76805/Return-to-Sender-Unrequited-Love-is-Painful-for-the-Rejector-Too). Ten minutes ago, I conversed with a girl who loved a boy, but he did not find her interesting in that sense. Having someone care for you deeply is a responsibility and an inevitability. How would one make the other suppress herself... and not feel like c*ap... even through, in the end, this might be the lesser of two evils.
On the other hand hover... "Have you ever been in love? Horrible isn't it? It makes you so vulnerable. " (http://thinkexist.com/quotation/have-you-ever-been-in-love-horrible-isn-t-it-it/347156.html) Being in love means risking getting hurt... and it's hurt we can't let go of since we repeatedly go back for seconds.
I'm intrigued - such a short thought, but so many interpretations and ideas. Well phrased.
Thank you for keeping my brain busy for half an hour."
Posted by DavidVale on "unlucky is an understatement" by eidos
- "This actually could be looked at from two different perspectives... The unlucky one could be the one giving the affection, or the unlucky one could be the one receiving the affection depending on the circumstances of your relationship...and the situation the reader may be involved in... I have been the victim of several abusive relationships, so i lean toward the latter, but either way, I like it. GREAT JOB!"
Posted by Kainoa on "unlucky is an understatement" by eidos
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