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- "Sounds like maybe somebody could be an asthmatic maybe? Words can wound and can't be called back, well done and welcome to DP!"
Posted by dwells on "in ways that break hearts." by eidos
- "I wonder if one can use it up on another... assuming these actions to be indicative of a motivation arising from genuine concern... can one use up concern for another... Fursorge... or just Sorge.... in heideggerian terms..... the state of being towards another, I mean. I think there are some who cannot be, but I wonder what it would take to make one completely without... or is it a matter of no longer for that one.... anyway, these were my thoughts. thanks."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "the ability to be broken" by eidos
- "It's fascinating the way something short like this can have such an impact. The last line was especially perfect. Very powerful piece."
Posted by Unknown on "the truth doesn't care" by eidos
- "the quality of the 'forever' is limited to the scope of the imagination and experience of the speaker ... as the quality of music is defined by the skill of the artist ..."
Posted by kinkifrog on "said the transient to the wall." by eidos
- "transient or trainsient? I didn't really consider the title much, but I read it as talking past the fly... almost as if aloof of the words... the transient, detachment, again. nice themes."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "said the transient to the wall." by eidos
- "the onlooker, the fly... the one who has not known of loss, and, perhaps... lives only a brief forever, an inconsequential forever... detached and nigh invisible? whereby the expression of love becomes naive and issued from an odd, detached point of view... something cold... something fleeting and ephemeral, as if words on a screen... blips of light rather than tangible ink on pulp. an enjoyable pondering, thanks."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "said the transient to the wall." by eidos
- "The difference is sometimes between the mind of the person speaking and the one hearing. One persons forever is another's moment, and some live forever in a moment. I have those that I will love forever, though the emotion behind that love has peaks and valleys - XXOO"
Posted by Nehema on "said the transient to the wall." by eidos
- "This is a very provoking write. I have read it several times and all I can gather is that perhaps it makes that intention very pure as there has never been failure or loss in it before. Forever really does mean forever, in that way. Such a confessional, yet reserved tone in this...it's like divulging the abc without the emo."
Posted by Amaryllis on "said the transient to the wall." by eidos
- "Forever is a very long time and when you do find somebody special again, you will find that you too have changed, cheers!"
Posted by dwells on "the ability to be broken" by eidos
- "Have also been here, am still effected by it in pretty big ways. You find a way to keep going even though you aren't the same person anymore. This was hard to read but well and simply written. I hope you find your way."
Posted by Lydia Jade on "the ability to be broken" by eidos
- "Heavy. Such is the risk we take when we invest completely in someone or something that fails, in the end, to come to fruition. I have been here before and hope never to be again. The last time the recovery period was enormous. Hope you find a way to recharge thank you for sharing your pain."
Posted by Dilated View on "the ability to be broken" by eidos
- "I had a fiddler crab once, named Clawed. He had huge claw, he waved it around constantly. Then one day, it was gone...i found it sucked up against the filter in the tank. Maybe the other crabs were jealous and he lost it in battle...maybe it got caught between the rocks and he had to decide if he would sit there and die intact or chew it off. I don't know, but it was gone and he hid out in the hollowed log for awhile...he rarely came out, barely ate. He eventually rejoined the others and carried on like normal, and he even grew a new claw...but, in the meantime, he had learned to live without one...so he just kind of dragged this new claw around...he didn't wave it around, or use it to tear his food. It was just there. This poem reminded me of that crab and his useless claw. "
Posted by Unknown on "the ability to be broken" by eidos
- "you provide such interesting reads with such brevity. very thoughtful pieces. i would love to see something longer from you, bet you could do wonders."
Posted by spikedwithLUST on "the truth doesn't care" by eidos
- "that last line... makes so much more of the cutting of grass, of the passerby... the coldness of heart that the 'you' becomes over a breaking of bread... but then, it's always with whom we break that makes the difference, maybe. Thanks for the thoughtful words."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "the truth doesn't care" by eidos
- "This forces the brain into reasoning with the briefest slice of succinct surreality, into stretching beyond its means. I like this very much."
Posted by Cyll Kroepe on "the truth doesn't care" by eidos
- "i agree with kinki, great title for the feel and emotion of the piece... this imbues a honest realization that aches to the core... a slipping of quicksilver through grasping fingers... crushing with a soft weight.... well done indeed"
Posted by NikesRain on "a tongue like unstruck matches." by eidos
- "sometimes it just isn't... those dry eyes... how coldly they may see. the 'chalked up' added a colloquialism tone, kinda after-the-factly type of mood to the whole... and a finality... "wayou" I'm thinkin this is typo more than neologism? a pleasure, thanks muchly as the sainted would say... avoid those 3rd rate romances, chief."
Posted by The Dybbuk on "a tongue like unstruck matches." by eidos
- "Wow...that really put me into the moment. Wrenching piece, eidos. You got me broodin' over here. A harsh & sad finality to it, sometimes this is necessary...very effective. "
Posted by Unknown on "a tongue like unstruck matches." by eidos
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