Comments by All Members
- "You seem to have a handle on the reality of the most common reason for failed relationships. One cannot love others truly without first loving themselves. Nice write, thanks for sharing this gem - XXOO"
Posted by Nehema on "Hollow Love" by Awesomeshiloh
- "I think you should type out the words, hard for my eyes to focus... The drawing stands on it's own just fine, but I'm curious about the accompanying words... - XXOO"
Posted by Nehema on "lost soul" by Awesomeshiloh
- "hugs* this...was painful to read. so well done, but...so painful. even in the "dulled out" version, the intense pain is evident, keep writing all your pain out..."
Posted by iceshot11 on "Broken Opiate Heart" by Awesomeshiloh
- "thanks, and you couldn't be more right. i wrote it initially for it to be printed in the church handout for the funeral. :) i'm also waiting for the next time the poetry course on this site is offered, so i can better form my thoughts into written word. "
Posted by Awesomeshiloh on "Broken Opiate Heart" by Awesomeshiloh
- "Your combination of phrases describes the situation... but I'm not sensing the desperation, pain, or bitterness. The repetition of simple words gives this a definite layman feel, but don't be afraid to go all-out with emotional rage. It seems like you're dulling it down to be.. polite, almost. Also, watch the spelling errors."
Posted by Feral on "Broken Opiate Heart" by Awesomeshiloh
- "thanks for the feedback, any tips or critisism helps. i never had any formal training and my poetry knowledge doesn't extend much past making it rhyme, lol. Solipsist was actually the first book of Rollins that i read in the pen. my favorite of his is the Mechanik"
Posted by Awesomeshiloh on "Thoughts from a cell 1" by Awesomeshiloh
- "thanks for the comments. my bad on the all caps, its just how write stuff out free hand. wasn't really trying to emphasize the poem, but thanks again for any input"
Posted by Awesomeshiloh on "Empty Life" by Awesomeshiloh
- "I would comment on this poem but I just feel so blase' today that I might just put it off until tomorrow maybe (HA)! This had a superb finish that wrapped things up very nicely. Welcome to DP and your style seems familiar to somebody who showed promise and then drifted away. Cheers!"
Posted by dwells on "Empty Life" by Awesomeshiloh
- "I feel ya. Hello there and welcome to Darkpoetry.. Make sure to roam and read and it shall bring em back to ya as well.. If you eva need anything i'm a click away. And before anyone else says anything when you post in all caps it kinda detours readers away. Although I understand why it's initially done as far as wanting to be heard.. I hear you love.. "
Posted by Devilish on "Empty Life" by Awesomeshiloh
