Comments by All Members
- "i think there are always memories and such that we try to rid ourselves of, but people are hard to lose i think, more than just those physical reminders, they leave small bits of themselves with us. "
Posted by Unknown on "Loose Tape" by Sin Amor
- "Your pen shimmers renewed even though through heavy ink drips. Beautifully executed this piece is and it flew like a lightning through a darkened sky..........I really enjoy the way you complement life and death , the burden of life and the flight of death....opposing the negative and positive. Very enjoyable piece. Thank you! "
Posted by The Coloured Cello on "Crows on the 16th" by Sin Amor
- "immediately that opening line is magnificent!..'consciousness..' how heavy and truth bearing this is..and to use metal to describe these crows was cleverly done..and then after seeing something as abstract and city bound a birds gripping you my stomach sinks and my heart slows to the last two lines..like that ocean wave slowly came back to swallow and drown me in the expanse of this poem..as heavy as a mountain my bones shattered beneath the minute split second of death.. how it took the earth countless centuries to build one tower and seconds to rid of a life..to decompose into the ever self sustaining world..troubles..heartache..all the obstacles and then the slips between...you are a real poet..I'm impressed by your offerings.."
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Crows on the 16th" by Sin Amor
- "simple? I'll take it for what I see.. smug like a president of his caliber would be.. innovators..leaders...worth their weight in gold.. face autographed to the highest bill amount of american currency...stare off with money...blink..is is there?
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Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Oh, Mr. Franklin" by Sin Amor
- "well worded..numerous shallow sunsets..gives a repetitious feeling..of no change..lack of real acceleration ....poetically driven well..passion slipping towards greed..need for physical replenishment.. as an atheists dream.nice touch there..selfishness in the realm of higher power.juggernaut to your past but then all of a sudden it brings you down.. the unsent gifts..unread letters.. brings this to a halt.. repenting change.. great entry"
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Loose Tape" by Sin Amor
- "interesting how listless and stillness,spelled with the same letters carry a highly similar meaning.. this place obviously shadowed ,at night seems to be placed at a hospital bed side or house room..and you watching the last hours tick down.. there was a great relationship between the characters here.. and the separation is intense.. this piece really caught my thinking.. held me in its crux of lamentation.. the bloody screams and cry.. dribbled weeps.. abstract slight indeed though.. I can always be wrong.. but what I saw was a well thought out poem....welcome to dp..hope to see more of ya "
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Sound of Stillness" by Sin Amor
- "This takes me to the wild places...where I think about how heavy life is...how light death is...so true. The responsibilties of life, the devourers...death, the release. I couldn't have worded it better...this is a train of thought that has been running through my mind for some time...thank you for the starkly inspiring words. & truly...the buildings are quite unremarkable....at least the way I see it...."
Posted by Unknown on "Crows on the 16th" by Sin Amor
- "Hehe, I like how you are altering it in accords to the economy. I swear this used to be a 20. Or should it be less now? God knows. Something about the way you echo Franklin's expression in yours is interesting and makes one think of the possible symbolism. I think I'll let my mind just stay fascinated with the concept being open. :)"
Posted by The Coloured Cello on "Oh, Mr. Franklin" by Sin Amor
- "Yeah, thats actually really close to my own opinion of this piece. I'm glad i'm not entirely incognizant in my own critique of it. I considered getting rid of all the I's but then decided to leave them there for some reason. "
Posted by Sin Amor on "Endless Path" by Sin Amor
- "hmmmm.... I always tend to shy away from delving into the details of others poetry.... I mean, this reads like a poem, to me, and yeah, the rhyme is a funny thing, I sometimes avoid it, but I seem to like alliterative verse if nothing else... I like the image at the end, and religious themes tend to attract my attention, but I would probably seek to delete some of the 'I's ... however... that is just personal preference. Welcome to the valley and thanks for sharing."
Posted by Unknown on "Endless Path" by Sin Amor
