Comments by All Members
- "you got it bad, my friend, smitten and bitten by the love bug.
decent write.
thanks for sharing."
Posted by natalie on "My Curse" by maliceman
- " love can be confusing, like hiccups in life things that confuse and throw us off....this read had that kinda feel...up and down,like emotions. seemed like the lyrics to a song.
welcome to dp."
Posted by natalie on "Fake" by maliceman
- "Both poems were amazing! This one might be my favorite so far. "I may not be psychic, but I can see us lasting forever." I really like that line especially. You should do another double poem."
Posted by 10 Forty Three on "A Lie Before A Truth" by maliceman
- "i believe i have fixed the you're and they're problems. as for the capitalization, it has its own meaning"
Posted by maliceman on "Fake" by maliceman
- "I like the rise and fall of the structure and flow. It creates an imbalanced feeling, like being on the precipice of either love or doom, unsure as to which way you'll fall. - It would have been more engaging but the oddly capitalized letters here and there were somewhat distracting. Also the lack of contractions took me out of the work's flow. Your is posessive, and You're is the contraction for you are. The same issue with "their." You used it correctly in the "you're a rose, but you've wilted" line. Sorry but I'm a touch obsessive about those things. - The meaning behind the poem was very familiar and oh so true. - Welcome to DP."
Posted by Scarrzz on "Fake" by maliceman
