Comments by All Members
- "Ah, now that I see these are lyrics, the label of the male-female makes more sense. As a poem, I would say this doesn't need those markers, and I tend to find such things distracting. Perhaps just an indication that it's a new part, representing a different person. That's if you feel you'd like to present it as a poem. Any way... Isn't that all anyone wants, to be recognized for who they really are? This captures that feeling well. Also, the imagery of the wings is a catching concept. Nice write."
Posted by wilted on "Broken Angel" by Deaths Apostle
- "I would love to hear this one with music. I feel like you wanna break free, but on the other had you really don't, so it's a difficult choice, but in the end you do break free."
Posted by Unknown on "Break Free" by Deaths Apostle
- "very well said....the style was a captivating choice, it made me think about what you were saying in a whole different light...very nice "
Posted by UnrequitedDream on "Memories" by Deaths Apostle
- "Damn...this kind of realization is not easy...it's like pulling nails from a stud with finger nail clippers...
an appendectomy with a butter knife.Maybe your decision is right,maybe it is wrong.Whatever the case,it is the hardest decision of them all.I thank you for the blood from your veins."
Posted by Honey on "My Dearest Love" by Deaths Apostle
- "This is pretty decent; a lot of great imagery and verbiage, though the grammar-errors (ie: capping of random words throughout) drove me a little batty.
Other than that, well done & thanks for sharing.
x."
Posted by Unknown on "Untitled (Part I)" by Deaths Apostle
- "This piece reminds me of my old self. Great times -- or not. I liked the imagery."
Posted by Unknown on "Lies" by Deaths Apostle
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