Comments by All Members
- "I love this poem; it reminds me of my first relationship (metaphorically). I noticed, however, that you forgot the I in the sentence where you put the knife to her throat. Otherwise, there's nothing that could make this better."
Posted by harlequinn on "Valentine's Day" by KuroiBara
- "an ode to beauty.... may it never lie; I prefer the Urn, but... cold pastoral! ... is an odd line, this was very rich in color and scene, subtle in love and death, and cast in a tone resembling a nightmarish dream waiting to raise its monstrous head, maybe... dimension on the skin.. I love that line... depth and yet, dementia underneath... the blood in the sky, very foreboding... quite the ominous write, thank you, and welcome back, it's been some time. "
Posted by The Dybbuk on "Dolls looking into the horizon" by KuroiBara
- "Truth is beauty and beauty truth. That is all ye know on earth and all ye need to know (Keats I think, or Shelley?) - kinda reminds me of that, but I like this better, thanks!"
Posted by dwells on "Dolls looking into the horizon" by KuroiBara
- "i like this! the sun can appear as the sea , enlivening the inner cast of characters .... Thanks for the view!"
Posted by Opklot on "Sunset" by KuroiBara
- "Sure thing.....I will send you a list of the songs I put down!!!I just gotta remember them all lol. Not to worry...I will be able to give you a list since I have the file with me and all."
Posted by KuroiBara on "Poem Made of Random Song Lyrics" by KuroiBara
- "aww, no type o neg lyrics? +pout+
lol. i love it. it's faved. but is that the gnr or original version of hair of the dog? .. hey.. do me a favor and put down what songs the lines come from. that would be awsome.. i love alice in chains!!"
Posted by boundandfallen on "Poem Made of Random Song Lyrics" by KuroiBara
- "very very sorry... but the first stanza is killing me. Do you really mean to use "you're" instead of "your"? "You're" should imply "you are", where "your" would imply an ownership... such as this is your write."
Posted by Sketso on "Missing Kidney to Missing Kidney" by KuroiBara
- "It's not really. Those people just didn't think when they said Forever. Forever is like the word 'Love' and those ou have to mean and when you mean it, you keep that promise. I've known couples that have celebrated their 66th wedding anniversary. You just have to know what you're talking about and if you love someone as much as 'forever'. Forever.. is however long you want it to be. -mars"
Posted by Mars on "How long is forever?" by KuroiBara
- "reminds me of how i used to write. a while back. welcome to dp. i'll read this some other time, i just scaneed through it. -mars"
Posted by Mars on "Valentine's Day" by KuroiBara
