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- "This confuses me further are you agreeing with Bella or me because I see both. . .?? o_O i think i might just be really out of it tonight. . ."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "that's exactly what I thought when I read it... what suffixes, where. but um, maybe it was just stickin with the title?"
Posted by Unknown on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "I am giving this a great big "huh?" cuz frankly i dont know what you mean. . .its a simple collection of 6 couplets with four syllables in the first line and roughly 8 in the second line. . ."
Posted by Lawless Fighter on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "to help with the rhyme scheme in the future, it helps to switch up the end suffix of verbs / adjectives / and nouns.. i saw you do it alittle, so expand on it, and see what takes form, maybe you will like it more"
Posted by Bella Butchery on "Incoherence" by Lawless Fighter
- "Knowing you, I expected to look at this and find nothing, a blank page with a title, but this was a really fun write, despite the couple spelling errors. It is almost a parody written on writing itself, nice."
Posted by Trigger on "The Blank Paper" by Lawless Fighter
- "I like Darkness as a pronoun. This is good, better than the origanal, I think. My favourite line was 16, that was good. And I'm still loving the concept. Darkness as a lover... hmm..."
Posted by Trigger on "Darkness Still Loves Me" by Lawless Fighter
- "I'll be honest... the title made me think "EMO!" And then I remembered, you hate emo. This is a good piece throughout. The theme is very interesting, darkness as a lover... hmm..."
Posted by Trigger on "Darkness Loves Me" by Lawless Fighter
- "The ending made me smile. This worries me... but you have a good piece here, the ending almost reminds me of 'Heirate Mich.' My only complaints were a couple of grammatical errors, but other than that, a good piece."
Posted by Trigger on "As you sleep" by Lawless Fighter
- "I like this at first I thought it was gonna be stupid for many people choose this topic and then make it sound retarded and ruin it somehow not, but you didn't lose the flow and you did a great job! :)"
Posted by Distorted_Reality on "Darkness Loves Me" by Lawless Fighter
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