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A work in progress...
By Cutting_for_Freedom
Confusion, wondering which way to turn
Spin the dial, play another round
Everything is at stake, yet you lose nothing
The price of the game -- your soul
Yet, it's too cliche
Let's make it your heart instead
Don't worry, we shall leave the love behind
After all, we don't accept damaged goods
I'm not finished yet, I'm just at a block.. Part of me wants to leave it
just the way it is, yet I feel I should write more... Let me know what
you think.
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© 2006 Cutting_for_Freedom
Published on Saturday, January 7, 2006.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "A work in progress..."
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On Wednesday, February 22, 2006, The Crimson Queen
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wrote:
Oh hun, I think this just ripped the breath right out of me! The last line just instantly crushed my heart, I think it's perfect exactly how it is now.
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A former member wrote:
no keep it this way..ending line is great, but of course you are the creator and may do as you please
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A former member wrote:
I like the ending alot..
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A former member wrote:
"After all, we don't accept damaged goods" Wow...that line is the line that pulls everything together. It's wonderful the way it is, but if you change it, I believe it'll become magnificent. However, do what you feel is right. *Evangel*
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