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To my forever
By Nuada
(alternate title is "twist of fate")
ok i know this will seem corny and all however being a musician i wrote
as a very short song (2min 05 seconds) and I wrote this to the woman of
my dreams though i have yet to met her. LOL so please judge away and any
criticism is welcome
walk with me under the desert moonlight
talk with me all through the night
hold my hand and look in my eyes
cant you see i would give you my life
i feel so alive when you look at me
your hand in mine and i'm trembling
your lips touch mine and i can see
the world is mine when your with me
o' baby wont you fly with me
we'll find so much just you and me
a twist of fate and there you are
you stole my heart you shinning star
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Copyright 2005 Nuada
Published on Sunday, January 23, 2005.
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A former member wrote:
aweeee i like this this is beautiful and sweet lovely write
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On Wednesday, January 26, 2005, island warrior
(210)
wrote:
Beautifully written.
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On Monday, January 24, 2005, Nuada
(9) wrote:
like i say corny and i agree the me and me thing is a little lame for a song and the o'baby actually works if you hear it. Gernerally i dont use that in my sogns though as it is silly (even for a roamtic/optimist such as myself)
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, sIo
(926) wrote:
a perfect picture. so sweet and gentle.
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
Stupid cold fingers and their nontypingness. I meant'kind' not 'kinf=d'
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
and 'but' not 'nut'
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
The "O' baby" kinf=d of turned me off of it a little nut overall nice piece. I feel like this everyday I'm with my fiance.
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, K_Love
(525) wrote:
The 2nd to last stanza bothered me with the rhyming me with me, but this piece was very beautiful and everything flowed wonderfully. I loved every word. Incredible job, nicely written.
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, stormtalk
(729) wrote:
"Twist of fate," "shining star," and "stole my heart" are a bit on the cliche side for my taste; however, overall, this work was touchingly simple and made for easy relation. Also, I've felt exactly the same... keep looking ;)
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On Sunday, January 23, 2005, ShardsofSilence
(222) wrote:
aw i think it's lovely. very beautiful. nice work ;p
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