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80 Hour Drive
By AbjectColloquialist
What could be so important
to keep me away from you.
Nothing short of death should separate us.
But there was nothing I could do.
Every mile between us
is a pin in my voodoo doll me.
Every thought I have of you,
Makes my heart beat again.
And, when it beats it hurts
Its the pain that keeps me alive
Its the pain that pushes the pedal
On this 80 hour drive.
Im running out of bracelets to send
The scars show from shoulder to end
A timeline Ive kept since we parted ways
I count the marks, I count the days
Since Ive felt your touch
Since Ive felt anything at all.
A man turned to me at the station
asked where I was going
I turned to him, dried my eyes and I said
"Happiness, If it will take me back."
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Copyright 2004 AbjectColloquialist
Published on Friday, September 17, 2004.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "80 Hour Drive"
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On Thursday, July 21, 2005, Lotophagi
(333)
wrote:
the flow of this piece is amazing. I love your expression, the simple styling and energetic pulsing that pushes this along, much like listening to your favourite music while on a long drive. just awesome. Thank you.
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On Wednesday, January 5, 2005, Gideon Lost
(138) wrote:
Nice write man. I like the personification of Happiness.
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On Wednesday, January 5, 2005, spaniellie
(76) wrote:
omg, this is so sad and so beautiful. i loved every word great job!
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On Monday, October 18, 2004, sIo
(926) wrote:
nice.
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A former member wrote:
"Every mile between us is a pin in my voodoo-doll me." That line hurts the most, but it's my favorite in this poem. Don't run out of gas. ~Shane~
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A former member wrote:
Heh I was going to quote that, a wonderful concept. ~Wish Upon A Star
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A former member wrote:
If you simply drove for 80 hours straight, would you arrive with your happiness early, or just late?
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A former member wrote:
What? What? Who? What?
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A former member wrote:
ooohhhhh, this is sweet. thank you for posting this. This is a really really good write.
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On Thursday, September 23, 2004, AHHH
(187) wrote:
oh god awesome. this is the best, thank you for writing and posting this.
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On Thursday, September 23, 2004, AbjectColloquialist
(32) wrote:
Im glad you folks like it, it means a lot to me.
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A former member wrote:
awwwwwwhhhhh :)
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On Friday, September 17, 2004, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
the closing stanza is just marvellous... one of those poetic moments that will burn itself into my memory for a long time. welcome to dp.
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