The Metal Box

By Zhee

Smell the death and decay
In the grave where you lie,
The million eyes in the dark
That live to watch you die.

In the metal box you sit
Into the silence you call,
As you start to break away
And watch your pieces fall. . .

Your crumbling face cries
Into these dark folds,
As cold metal reflects
The filth that it holds.

Clawed hands will grasp
What rots with the flies,
What never breathes
And yet never dies. . .

And the metal box is lost,
Into the abyss it rolls.
With all the faceless bodies -
Who once sold their souls. . ..


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Copyright 2004 Zheala
Published on Thursday, August 5, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • island warrior On Monday, January 31, 2005, island warrior (210)By person wrote:

    I like your writing it's quality over quantity

  • Blood of Winter On Tuesday, November 2, 2004, Blood of Winter (296)By person wrote:

    Love the flow of this piece...and morbid imagery that you weave

  • Angst Queen On Friday, October 8, 2004, Angst Queen (370)By person wrote:

    boxes...yes boxes...all of us are trapped in them...excellant poem

  • Nesfurata On Monday, September 27, 2004, Nesfurata (58)By person wrote:

    Very good, it gets more profound each time I read it. -Elizabeth

  • Dayer On Thursday, September 9, 2004, Dayer (162)By person wrote:

    Loved the ending, this is a great poem

  • A former member wrote: Wow..a great poem..i love the ending:)

  • A former member wrote: Boxes are square. Boxes are everywhere. We are all boxes.

  • A former member wrote: "With all the faceless bodies - Who once sold their souls. . .. " made me think here Zhee, great write :)

  • JiNx On Friday, August 6, 2004, JiNx (98)By person wrote:

    great flow... very sad though... Great Write! *JiNx*

  • GirlintheBox On Friday, August 6, 2004, GirlintheBox (41)By person wrote:

    good rhyme scheme, nice flow *krystal*

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