The beginning and end of a suicide

By SluG

Nothing seems to work for you.
(the bathtub is full of lukewarm water.)

I have tried so hard for you.
(the razor lies in anticipation.)

what do I have to do for you?
(I slip in the tub fully clothed and relaxed.)

The shit I've been through for you.
(the sound of your favorite song in my ears.)

I absolutley fucking hate you.
(I try not to move so I can hear nothing.)

But its ok cause I'm going away from you.
(The steady drip-drip of the water annoys me.)

It will be soothing to stay away from you.
(I pick the razor up and slowly push.)

the sweetness of the warmth from you.
(Its ok, they needed to breathe, but its getting dark)

I have finally left you.
(I like the feeling of the water going into my nose.)

My fingers are getting heavy, I hope I dont go before this is aksg'dsfdsaf;







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Copyright 2003 SluG
Published on Sunday, November 23, 2003.     Filed under: "Depressed" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: i like it....especially the ending...good job

  • Dei On Wednesday, May 18, 2005, Dei (665)By person wrote:

    This is actualy veyr goood. well done

  • Dei On Wednesday, May 18, 2005, Dei (665)By person wrote:

    did you have your lap top in there with you... that might electricute you. jp

  • Munkey On Saturday, August 14, 2004, Munkey (79)By person wrote:

    amazing it shows the realityof finally being able to just let it all go. Beautiful. -Munkey-

  • A former member wrote: OMG adam that is sad it makes me want to cry

  • A former member wrote: i like this one it is great. i feel like that all the time.

  • Solace On Monday, November 24, 2003, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    I think i could cry, but i've finished crying for now... This is exactly how i feel right now...Thank you for writing down an agony I cant express at the moment

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Monday, November 24, 2003, Spiritus_Frumenti (341)By person wrote:

    very raw image of an unfortunate reality...-l-

  • purr_verse On Sunday, November 23, 2003, purr_verse (1059)By person wrote:

    this is great! i like the format and the completely unexpected last line - clever and witty and all-round nice work... :) purr

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