Your Advice

By Silent_Raven

i talk to you
and you listen patiently
as i unload a ton of bricks
at your feet, all my mounted misery,
and after a while you stop
and speak
and it's then i know
you're the wisest man alive
because you never really lied to me-
that was all my doing.
and you tell me
that i need to grow
just a little,
to let go
of this silly notion in my head,
and i know you're right.
and so today,
today i let go of the rocky dirt
that has bound me to your knees,
i let go of my vines
(i've been a weed, a parasite)
and i stretch out my roots
and turn my face to the Sun,
your light,
because today i start to grow on my own,
a flower,
and hopefully i'll be strong enough to blossom
without a tressle to hold me up,
and maybe someday after i'm bright and vibrant,
someone will pick me above all the rest.
but first i've got to grow my own roots.

~For my beloved Andrew~

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Copyright 2003 Silent_Raven
Published on Sunday, October 19, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I can totally relate with the feeling of being a parasite, and wanting to change that.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Saturday, May 1, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1246)By person wrote:

    Nice one silent.. :O)

  • Mademoiselle_Minx On Friday, December 12, 2003, Mademoiselle_Minx (108)By person wrote:

    hmmm...i need to grow...beautiful write...i have taken this to heart...*sighs again*

  • cre On Monday, November 3, 2003, cre (411)By person wrote:

    Wonderful write . . absolute wisdom in these words . .

  • Six-Out On Sunday, October 19, 2003, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    Indeed, I've just realized this, and I wish I could've had that wisdom earlier...very good write.

  • A Velvet Tongue On Sunday, October 19, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436)By person wrote:

    it is such a confusing and emotional period in ones life...and you seem to be on the right track..Dont give up hun...even if it too hard to bear...You'll make it!!

  • A Velvet Tongue On Sunday, October 19, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436)By person wrote:

    this piece just dropped my jaw...if all the youth of today realized this..how much easier it would be for them to venture into adulthood..

  • manywalks On Sunday, October 19, 2003, manywalks (750)By person wrote:

    I rather enjoyed this, especially liked the "i've been a weed..." line, took the piece in a couple of different directions. Well done, thanks. ~ mw

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