T-bones & Vampire Stakes
By Loserland
As is often noted, virtue occurs in the most macabre settings
You were my angel from the night, covering me like a shadow
A sacrifice for your kind, a lost soul for you to borrow
An unbearable cross forsakened, as my sacred life deadens
Your nocturnal hair and paled skin, transposes these veins unhallow
Allowing your flames to scorch my throat with sensual bloodlettings
Drawn by infelt desire, surrendered now to the eternal beast
Your acute markings thrust on me, leave a tantalizing scar
Stalked with a new craving, sculptured from what you are
An animal shunned by the light, drown in demonic feast
We carried no chains of limitation, no spirit sealed in a jar
Beside you i felt reborn and secure, fully loved and pleased
Now you lie before me with a stake driven deep into your chest
Your secret uncovered by killers, ending a precious majestic era
Eyes swell in vain, my cold condemned body petrified with horror
Crouching over your lovely corpse, i taste your still seeping flesh
Such pain in a hollow heart, so to defeat this agonizing terror
I will join you by my own bloodshed, together we will be at rest
Comments on "T-bones & Vampire Stakes"
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A former member wrote:
Awww .... this is very romeo and juliet. So sweet and sad. I think macabre is a VERY good word to describe this work. Well done :)
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A former member wrote:
Like a gothic fairy tale.. With amazing descriptions and macabre intent. Hauntingly great writing.
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On Sunday, February 22, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
dredging the depths ... thanks for the ride ... funguy
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A former member wrote:
good really good. Drake
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On Thursday, October 2, 2003, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
detailed, enchanting....i wish i wrote like this
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On Tuesday, September 30, 2003, Drea
(1388) wrote:
::looks at dolly mumbles...comment stealer:: i cant NOT love this.. i just love your work.. i look forward to more~Drea~ /X\(..)/X\
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A former member wrote:
This is captivating, you word usage and phrasing bring pensive pauses and build tension up until the last stanza. It's a mystery how you stayed away from here for so long. Great write.
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On Monday, September 29, 2003, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
yeah I like the way you write.. keep em coming and Welcome.
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On Monday, September 29, 2003, hate_doll
(263) wrote:
Drawn in by the title, captivated by the words...ah, you speak of disturbed and twisted notions...you've already caught my eye ;) I no give you a whole-hearted welcome to dp! WELCOME!