You Lost My Love
By Killerdemonchick
I sit here and let the sun shine over me
I look from the hill and see as far as my eyes can see
I feel the faint feeling of snow on my skin
I close my eyes and I grin
I can feel you here, your shadow places me in darkness
I no longer feel filled with sickness
You returned to me my love
You returned to me from up above
But when I turn I realise that it is not truly you
I realise now that I had not a clue
That instead of above where I thought you went
That down below is where you were truly sent
Your eyes once so blue are a shattering black
For love and affection your eyes did lack
You smiled at me but it was not at all sweet
You were looking at me like I was a piece of meat
I tried to run but I knew this was my end
The hell hound towards me you did send
"You never should have asked for me back"
"Now you shall be my dogs little snack"
"We were in love", I cried
We were together until you died
But none of that mattered to you anymore
Now you just saw me as a little whore
Your hound finally pounces on me and I give up with just one scream
Because you did not realise my little scheme
I slowly feel the life pulse out of me and I die
You never realised that I was this sly
I end up becoming just like you a worker of Lucifer
And for the rest of your existence I will make you suffer
Suffer for betraying me and losing my love that I gave you
But I guess that I always knew.
Comments on "You Lost My Love"
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A former member wrote:
Ahaha people are conniving and often have ulterior motives for what they do, but in their self involvement they often underestimate those they try to bring down in their schemes. Great story, with a lovely twist.
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A former member wrote:
I know exactly how this feels. Thank you for posting
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A former member wrote:
nice story of betrayal..betrayal is one of the most hardest suffering..i hope you are good..and as far as the piece is concerned..it is engrossing..n the flow is really good..thanks for sharing :)
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On Thursday, December 6, 2012, PoetessDarkly
(693) wrote:
awesome ending. I so enjoy a good dark poem.
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A former member wrote:
You're progressing more and more with every new poem, holding less back it seems and it's really working.. Keep it up, nice twist also.. and your profile pic is pretty snazzy :P
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A former member wrote:
great write... the twist at the end, just perfect... and here I was feeling sorry for you for a moment... buy your too "sly" for that.
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On Tuesday, December 4, 2012, haunted
(837) wrote:
thats really good. i loved it! such a great story and a little on the ironic side. a love a little twist. great job demon!
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A former member wrote:
Love... being poetry's engine since ever.