Untitled
By QuartzAl18
Torn Between reality and fiction
I'm both alive and dead at the same
time
Because sorrow had committed an aweful crime
By shattering
my heart.
Untitled to the hurt,
I am feeling the dark
years
As I'm crying acidic tears.
Having me wrapped in a blanket
of the world's fears!
Feeling confused like playing lacrosse
This life always seem to get double cross
With lies and discomfort!
Aaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!!!
The unnatural reoccurring
pain
Is what I gain
When entering This world.
(But in
reality My mother chose me from the bottom of a long glass tube)
So I'll cut myself to empty the flow of blood
Until it becomes a
flood
Of despair for me to drown in?
Ehh!
I don't
know who's side I'm on...
(Which side I'm on?)
A thin line painted
across the veil
As bloody fingers stain everything that I touch.
Show me its real
So, please everyone leave me be
As
I find an new alternative in which to end my Existence!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Note:
Show Me It's RealComments on "Untitled"
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On Saturday, November 24, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Just borrowed much of you first line for a work titled "Untitled Agony" and mentioned in my author's notes. You never can tell where an inspiration comes from - FYI and thanks!
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On Friday, November 23, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Some great lines but it began with some forced rhymes that were abandoned as it progressed near the ending. Not sure which style you prefer but it was a very welcome effort and let me say welcome to DP! Keep writing!
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On Friday, November 23, 2012, Strataic
(99) wrote:
Robyn, pretty much said what I would have... dammit... That blood flow has many ways to come and go... either way nicely put thanks
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On Friday, November 23, 2012, Nehema
(958) wrote:
I like your style, almost like a rap verse. Life is confusing at times, dark and meaningless, and other times it's bright and beautiful. We can control some of it with attitude and perception, but usually that's just a bunch of bullish... Again welcome - XXOO
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On Friday, November 23, 2012, QuartzAl18
(21) wrote:
Thank you so much you guys.
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On Friday, November 23, 2012, whisperingwalls
(210) wrote:
Digging the soul and message behind the words, just need to polish the presentation and delivery. Poetry is an evolving process. In response to the message, revel in reality and fiction- they find a way to intertwine.
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On Friday, November 23, 2012, poe_lover28
(163) wrote:
so very sad..exquisite yet sad...your words seem to be bloody brail in themselves..if you need to talk about anything we are all here including me, welcome to this wonderful place. you will fit in well. best regards ~PL