The man with the metal eyes

By creature

 The man with the   
                            metal eyes                                                                                                      sees no colors,
                                                                 only lies.
 
 He feels for
                                        his face, 
         gently grasping, 
                        looking with grace.

    Though he is
           torn   
                                and nearly 
                             slain.
 
He was born to feel... 
                                                                             ... No pain.

   

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Copyright 2012 creature
Published on Tuesday, August 28, 2012.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • BrokenKatra On Wednesday, September 5, 2012, BrokenKatra (61)By person wrote:

    This work is touching. It tugs the tears to your eyes. Great work and its different but very well written. Almost like you could sing it. I hope you stay with us at DP. You seem to fit in well ^.^ great work. and Welcome :)

  • A former member wrote: I really like your work, it was intense and bold nice

  • Devilish On Thursday, August 30, 2012, Devilish (2657)By person wrote:

    Hell yeah. Different and beautiful. Hello there and welcome to darkpoetry.. roam around and read others as it will lead them back to you as well. if you eva need anything i'm a click away. dont be a stranger;. Scholar

  • creature On Wednesday, August 29, 2012, creature (9)By person wrote:

    Thank you, I look forward to posting more.

  • Ortolan On Wednesday, August 29, 2012, Ortolan (214)By person wrote:

    I was wondering if you made this into a song, because it clearly plays out as a song in my head, I really like this tune, or these lyrics...whatever you intended them to be.

  • creature On Wednesday, August 29, 2012, creature (9)By person wrote:

    i generally write my poems based off my paintings and i do play music so my art can sometimes come out like lyrics.

  • A former member wrote: How I wish I could have "metal eyes" at times...what a dream, to feel no pain. Great work!

  • DarkAsh On Wednesday, August 29, 2012, DarkAsh (45)By person wrote:

    This is really good! The odd formatting makes for a jilting read and it lends itself well to the message. Welcome to DP!

  • FadedBlues On Wednesday, August 29, 2012, FadedBlues (2168)By person wrote:

    ...he feels no pain, yet there is so much pain in this. mechanical man, who will never die, & never truly live...

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