Hells Retreat
By SaintNHB
Teach me, dreary, how to howl?
My tears are the seven seas
Teach me, dreadful, how to scowl?
My likings you will never appease
My black sin tied tongue
drips morbid nursery rhymes
Follow thee to coffin sleep
Follow thee to Hells retreat
Shall I take you now to pawn your soul?
You’ll get a ruby or two
Let me take that burden off your chest
…So you say you don’t trust me?
I would never screw
Upon midnights strike,
The moon is high
It takes only blood to enter the sky
Be a gent, wouldn’t you dear?
Ask a lady to dance
Take the lead, dip her back
Exposing skin, immortal sin
Plunge your teeth into her flesh
This is how a gent must act
in Hells retreat.
...Black...
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Copyright 2012 SaintNHB
Published on Thursday, June 21, 2012.
Filed under:
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Author's Note:
Wrote this quite a while back. Thought I'd post.Comments on "Hells Retreat"
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On Friday, June 22, 2012, midnights voice
(957) wrote:
Good working imagery.Don't change the word screw.We've already screwed ourselves so why would hell screw us.
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On Thursday, June 21, 2012, katlady121690
(19) wrote:
gosh, i really really liked this. very nice! :-)
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On Friday, June 22, 2012, SaintNHB
(41) wrote:
Thank you :)
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On Thursday, June 21, 2012, dwells
(4177) wrote:
A willing victim, hard to find sometimes, or maybe I've got it all backwards? Much enjoyed this welcome / warning of sorts, cheers.
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On Thursday, June 21, 2012, SaintNHB
(41) wrote:
Thank you, dwells. I always enjoy your comments. :)
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On Thursday, June 21, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
Saint, this so artistically sings the Vampire's spirit. I'd like to see you edit 'I would never screw' to 'I would never deny you' or 'I would never eschew'. just a little constructive interfering. & I see slight infuence from Cummings in the 'dance' stanza, which is wonderful...
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On Thursday, June 21, 2012, SaintNHB
(41) wrote:
thank you for the constructive criticism... and Cummings is my favorite poet, maybe he was rubbing off on me that night.