Hells Retreat

By SaintNHB

Teach me, dreary, how to howl?

My tears are the seven seas

Teach me, dreadful, how to scowl?

My likings you will never appease

 

My black sin tied tongue

drips morbid nursery rhymes

Follow thee to coffin sleep

Follow thee to Hells retreat

 

Shall I take you now to pawn your soul?

You’ll get a ruby or two

Let me take that burden off your chest

…So you say you don’t trust me?

I would never screw

 

Upon midnights strike,

The moon is high

It takes only blood to enter the sky

 

Be a gent, wouldn’t you dear?

Ask a lady to dance

Take the lead, dip her back

Exposing skin, immortal sin

Plunge your teeth into her flesh

This is how a gent must act

 in Hells retreat.



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Copyright 2012 SaintNHB
Published on Thursday, June 21, 2012.     Filed under: "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Wrote this quite a while back. Thought I'd post.
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  • midnights voice On Friday, June 22, 2012, midnights voice (957)By person wrote:

    Good working imagery.Don't change the word screw.We've already screwed ourselves so why would hell screw us.

  • katlady121690 On Thursday, June 21, 2012, katlady121690 (19)By person wrote:

    gosh, i really really liked this. very nice! :-)

  • SaintNHB On Friday, June 22, 2012, SaintNHB (41)By person wrote:

    Thank you :)

  • dwells On Thursday, June 21, 2012, dwells (4177)By person wrote:

    A willing victim, hard to find sometimes, or maybe I've got it all backwards? Much enjoyed this welcome / warning of sorts, cheers.

  • SaintNHB On Thursday, June 21, 2012, SaintNHB (41)By person wrote:

    Thank you, dwells. I always enjoy your comments. :)

  • FadedBlues On Thursday, June 21, 2012, FadedBlues (2096)By person wrote:

    Saint, this so artistically sings the Vampire's spirit. I'd like to see you edit 'I would never screw' to 'I would never deny you' or 'I would never eschew'. just a little constructive interfering. & I see slight infuence from Cummings in the 'dance' stanza, which is wonderful...

  • SaintNHB On Thursday, June 21, 2012, SaintNHB (41)By person wrote:

    thank you for the constructive criticism... and Cummings is my favorite poet, maybe he was rubbing off on me that night.

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