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The pain that River feels
By ladyofsorrow
Rivers lifes like a brickwall , stop and go stop and go.
This
brick wall lands on the ground SMASH - BOOM - POW the sky turns to flames
everytime he takes his steps.
He weaps and screams out for her but
no reply , for only he can see her but not when weak.
For the weakness
hides the pain he feels inside For the pain inside is much to weak not
only for he but also for the world to seek .
And as the walls come
crashing down yet again the heart that lies deep with in, bleeds and crys
why he stands only hopeing and prying to die.
for he could not
bare the fact any longer to go on in this world without his lover.
So he choose to go leaveing this cold curel world left in flames, For
he will soon be with her so he leaves no shame.
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Copyright 2012 ladyofsorrow
Author's Note:
I wrote this with a very close friend of mine.Awards
Comments on "The pain that River feels "
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A former member wrote:
I enjoyed this one 3 times... Its cryptic and has true emotion. Nice write and thank you for sharing.
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A former member wrote:
i know his pain and u know what i mean
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A former member wrote:
i had to read it twice to find its beautiful meaning - thank you
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On Friday, February 24, 2012, dwells
(4284)
wrote:
Hi and if I may a few typos tripped me up, but not so much as to detract from the raw emotion in this piece and the picture you painted with the words. Brought back sad memories of River Phoenix for some reason, cheers!
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On Friday, February 24, 2012, ladyofsorrow
(17) wrote:
Thanks and if you could help point them out ill fix them.
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On Sunday, February 26, 2012, dwells
(4284) wrote:
Hi and not sure now if typos or spelling, perhaps spellchecker would help in the future? Here are the correct words (I think) and you are a good sport thanks: weeps, too weak, hoping, praying, bear, leaving, cruel - cheers!
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A former member wrote:
You can tell you felt that as you wrote it. I enjoyed reading that.
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On Thursday, February 23, 2012, ladyofsorrow
(17) wrote:
Thank you it means alot to know people like my work.
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On Thursday, February 23, 2012, sTr8-jAcKeT
(735) wrote:
Very deep and seemingly personal. That's the beauty of art, especially in written form; it allows for so much. Thanks for sharing these insights my friend. Keep it up.
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