Almost

By ButterflyCity


you danced like ember
taking it's time to fall.


i was the ground, not moving,
ever so still...
holding my breath, finding a
new way to breathe again
because you pulled me into
this trance...

you ignited a flame without
ever touching me, you were
my yellow sun, and i was
.....earthbound..
too scared, too shy..

you cascaded to me..
while i traced your dance
with my eyes, so beautiful,
teasing..

but you just faded.
faster than you caught flame.
and i was just the ground,
never moving,
forever so still.

i just wanted to catch you.

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Copyright 2011 ButterflyCity
Published on Wednesday, November 16, 2011.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • whisperingwalls On Wednesday, November 16, 2011, whisperingwalls (210)By person wrote:

    Your imagery with the ashes, embers in motion, flame, I was truly captivated. I felt the fleeting moment at the end, it floors you. Great write.

  • Poe Etiquette On Wednesday, November 16, 2011, Poe Etiquette (124)By person wrote:

    honestly at first i wasnt planning on taking this seriously but thank you for giving me a reason to. you held true to the themes and metaphors you created and followed them through in a logical climax of action. hey. good job

  • veingo On Wednesday, November 16, 2011, veingo (526)By person wrote:

    So eager to go along. So eager to follow, and yet left behind for no good reason. That is the feeling this brings.. ^V^

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