It Was Beautiful
By TyrantAvDetForbannet
It was beautiful, quite a sight to behold
the dark coast of waters,
erie over embers
over these waters, a lone crow screech
come
to me dark spirit, human come to me
I felt such strength, and
the waves pulled at my feet
i said with much intent, i will swim to
thee
and gently swift with wings and feather's fleeing
I
step closer still into waters pulling
but there was no need for me
to strain
for i was healed of every ache and pain
what
a blessing one could be bestowed
and closer still i go
The crow
shifted,and i beheld a women
siren of suffering, reached for my
chest
i was lifted by her very stretch
and gazed at her for but
a second
"close you eyes dark spirit" she spoke
for you and I
are much the same
that's why i want to take your pain
"dont look
back, but swim to where you came"
and when i crawled onto the
shore
the moon lit all terrain
i stood for a second to look back
but never could I go against her word
because never have i seen
such grace
what a sight to behold...it was beautiful...
Comments on "It Was Beautiful"
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A former member wrote:
I think it is you that is beautiful! Way to paint a picture with your words!
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On Monday, July 25, 2011, Ladyhawke
(392) wrote:
Wow. I wanna see this place! Ur descriptive powers worked overtime on this didnt they. This is so beautiful. Wow, really.
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On Thursday, November 24, 2011, TyrantAvDetForbannet
(273) wrote:
Thanks once again lady.
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On Wednesday, July 6, 2011, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Wow! I should have known this would be beautiful... everytime it's awsome! I love your mind...
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On Thursday, November 24, 2011, TyrantAvDetForbannet
(273) wrote:
always beautiful as possible.
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On Tuesday, June 21, 2011, Nameless Pariah
(126) wrote:
No. You don't have to change anything. It was perfect. Lovely poem. Majestic imagery. :)
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On Thursday, November 24, 2011, TyrantAvDetForbannet
(273) wrote:
I know i dont, i wrote it just the way i wanted, thank you very much >=E