you wouldn't believe me if I told you, but...
By DIATRICUS
Where is my dreamland
This dire eve?
I feel a cool, crisp, subtle breeze
Per-
co-
lating off the winter shore
Simplistic notion of this but nothing more
Elo-
quent
com-motion populates the treatise
Paleanthropic distant fires from long forgotten tribes do light our
Solemn, whistful spirits
Ulterior
Set type — not inferior
Atavastic, yet unforgiving, sans altruistic
Peculiar forms dance through the ecliptic
A short-coming, sensation unfulfilled, settles hard on my long stick
Pre-
emp-
tive measures formulate a turn-about
Merry corre--lation whirling in a waterspout
Devise my contemplation
Sickly written indisposed disposition of pasty
White condition
And then I saw it…
In the middle of the hall
On the oval, black and white marbled table
Next to the purplish-green tall cubic vase
Staring back at me, even as I looked into its shining,
Bright fluorescent glowing hazel eyes
Clicking its flicker-flacker dark brown bristly hairs,
Which lay combed flat on those many, many legs...
Licking its -- wait! are those teeth?!
Just before — !
Comments on "you wouldn't believe me if I told you, but..."
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A former member wrote:
trippy, to say the least *atavistic*... there are so many times I'd like something to settle hard on my long stick, but whatever this is, I'm thinkin this isn't one of em.
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On Saturday, November 22, 2008, DIATRICUS
(64) wrote:
Yes, I didn't mean for the atavism to settle -- I was speaking of the short-coming (the lack of fulfillment)... and that part didn't quite read for me either, so I changed it up... thanks for the comment!
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On Saturday, November 22, 2008, RubyXero
(481) wrote:
wow! great description and imagery. loved it!!!