[surely my bed is out to get me]

By asphyxia

My blanket
chokes with hands
made out of loneliness.

I can’t breathe, I can’t breathe, I can’t breathe
anymore without...

alarms sounding.
My mind on autopilot.

(Smothered I am,
in not second-,
but fifteenth-thoughts)

Two years ended in two days//
And those six months
just weren’t long enough.

Death is a twin-sized bed
that reminds a girl
she used to sleep
in perfect comfort [almost].

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Published on Tuesday, July 10, 2007. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "[surely my bed is out to get me]"

A former member wrote: Wow this poem left me speechless! This is by far one of the best poems I have ever read. "Two years ended in two days/And those six months/just weren't long enough" was just an amazing stanza. The flow was nice, the words went well together and I felt as though I could relate. Wow!!
On Saturday, July 28, 2007, BeautifullyRuined (93) wrote:

I had never read yours neither but i loved this.
On Wednesday, July 11, 2007, nur hidayah (114) wrote:

I can't believe how much you've captured in this. Well writ.
A former member wrote: Wow. This is really good. I like it a lot. So much to take in for so few words.
On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, Tania (192) wrote:

ahhh.. loved this ..'my blanket chokes with hands of lonliness.' ... 'death is a twin sized bed' beautiful display cutieful.lovvvve it :)
A former member wrote: this is my favorite from you for sure..loved it!
On Thursday, July 12, 2007, asphyxia (56) wrote:

i'm glad you liked it! =)
On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, Bella Butchery (696) wrote:

i fully agree with the saint... perfect
On Thursday, July 12, 2007, asphyxia (56) wrote:

not going to lie, i feel quite confident after receiving a third "perfect" on this. thank you very much!
On Tuesday, July 10, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

Jolene, Jolene, Jolene!!! **=)** I agree with the_Saint, spot on perfecto this was. Brevity and maximum inpact with minimal wording. Love it. -Carl