Comments by ubiquitoussoul
- "This I've read countless times...It completely engulfs me.. so well structured for each set flows into the next with ease..the ambiance surrounds and envelopes..naturally..till we are in complete betrayal of a presumed expectation..killed by a laden emotion..thank you"
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Teahouse" by Sin Amor
- "immediately that opening line is magnificent!..'consciousness..' how heavy and truth bearing this is..and to use metal to describe these crows was cleverly done..and then after seeing something as abstract and city bound a birds gripping you my stomach sinks and my heart slows to the last two lines..like that ocean wave slowly came back to swallow and drown me in the expanse of this poem..as heavy as a mountain my bones shattered beneath the minute split second of death.. how it took the earth countless centuries to build one tower and seconds to rid of a life..to decompose into the ever self sustaining world..troubles..heartache..all the obstacles and then the slips between...you are a real poet..I'm impressed by your offerings.."
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Crows on the 16th" by Sin Amor
- "simple? I'll take it for what I see.. smug like a president of his caliber would be.. innovators..leaders...worth their weight in gold.. face autographed to the highest bill amount of american currency...stare off with money...blink..is is there?
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Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Oh, Mr. Franklin" by Sin Amor
- "well worded..numerous shallow sunsets..gives a repetitious feeling..of no change..lack of real acceleration ....poetically driven well..passion slipping towards greed..need for physical replenishment.. as an atheists dream.nice touch there..selfishness in the realm of higher power.juggernaut to your past but then all of a sudden it brings you down.. the unsent gifts..unread letters.. brings this to a halt.. repenting change.. great entry"
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Loose Tape" by Sin Amor
- "interesting how listless and stillness,spelled with the same letters carry a highly similar meaning.. this place obviously shadowed ,at night seems to be placed at a hospital bed side or house room..and you watching the last hours tick down.. there was a great relationship between the characters here.. and the separation is intense.. this piece really caught my thinking.. held me in its crux of lamentation.. the bloody screams and cry.. dribbled weeps.. abstract slight indeed though.. I can always be wrong.. but what I saw was a well thought out poem....welcome to dp..hope to see more of ya "
Posted by ubiquitoussoul on "Sound of Stillness" by Sin Amor
