Comments by ALBATROSS

  • "I've been wondering where you went! I'm so glad you wrote something and posted it. That last line is a piercing truth that bleeds the person you speak of. This was awesome."
    Posted by ALBATROSS on "still. born" by Narcissa
  • ""And heroine a hobby Strapped to the tracks With no train coming" Very very clever. Impeccable descriptions with multiple meanings. I always love this kind of subject matter as well. I feel like there is always something unseen we can learn from the pariah of society. Interesting that she ends up 'empty handed' because a miracle is too much to ask. And empty handed symbolic of alone - with the other man but not holding his hand not truly "WITH" those around her. I am so thoroughly impressed. The intricacy is admirable. You write some mighty powerful stuff!"
    Posted by ALBATROSS on "Gutter Lily" by Narcissa
  • "Wow, I do have to agree that last line is a knockout. You wield your creativity refined with precision. Love it."
    Posted by ALBATROSS on "Paper White" by Narcissa
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