Comments by All Members
- "This poem was a surprise to read. But a beautiful, painfully honest surprise. The direction it took was not what I expected from the title, but the construction was swift and the imagery evocative. The self fulfilling prophecy at the end was deep, tragic insight that leaves a realistic fatalism to the beauty of the piece. Exquisite."
Posted by Unknown on "A couple bars (of broken bottles.)" by Candy Cain
- "Sometimes certain situations and emotions can be hard to put into words or expressed . I feel this is one of those moments that o e cannot relate to until it slaps you in the face . Don't worry about changing it for then it is not original . Leave it as is and go to your next poem . And along the way you will get better at expressing those deep ingrained emotions that cause us to write poetry ."
Posted by midnights voice on "Atop the Land of Diamonds/To Sink or not to Swim" by Candy Cain
- "Oh, thank you for the honest feedback. You're very good at reading the intents I put into things and I appreciate that. Would you suggest I change anything to make the imagery more relatable? Despite the tone of the words, it was actually written to a fast pace, cheery, campfire tune in major, which may have affected it this way."
Posted by Candy Cain on "Atop the Land of Diamonds/To Sink or not to Swim" by Candy Cain
- "Many images that are hard for the reader to relate to though they can be easily visualized . This is one that the reader would have to had been there to appreciate . But the feeling of mentalking exhaustion comes through loud and clear . Would have like to hear the music too ."
Posted by midnights voice on "Atop the Land of Diamonds/To Sink or not to Swim" by Candy Cain
- "I like it though. It's very clever and I love how you tear it down to build back onto it in a different way. I enjoyed this. "
Posted by Unknown on "Untitled Wave" by Candy Cain
- "I'm left wondering if I can find away to live inside this piece. I much enjoyed reading this aloud and letting your scape roll off my tongue... Hm, that sounded a bit dirty. Anyways, I fucking LOVE UNICORNS! ...I think I'm done here. -TG💋
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Posted by soul_versing on "the prince and the pretense" by Candy Cain
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