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- "I will agree with the previous comment, the overall flow of words in difficult to work with. The idea of creating a darker meaning to the original piece is fantastic, yet a little tweaking to the words to create an easy flow of words would do wonders. To be honest, a very good depiction of this nursery rhyme, you have great ways of writing and it's good to see that you continue to write. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "My Version of London Bridge" by Broken Rose
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Everyone has their own way of play.. Taking piece by piece off the board, clearing your way and assuring your own victory.. But games have a way of messing with your mind, as one wrong move will put you in a place you don't want to be.. Throwing away those that trust you... holding leverage above them for when they might hurt you.. We all do these things, we all have our own ammuniton to our weapon.. MissAngelic has stolen the words right out of my mouth, play your next move wth caution my dear.. you never know the outcome of your next move.. Overall, a fantastic piece, great use of showing how the world runs like a game. I enjoyed this greatly. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard. "
Posted by Unknown on "Manipulative Player" by Broken Rose
- "I love how this is based around games, board games and card games but has a much deeper meaning of how people 'play' games in life with each other. No one knows the hand they'll be dealt or if a sneaky move against another will come back to bite their own hand. Always play your next move with caution, you never know the outcome ;) great piece, I enjoyed reading "
Posted by MissAngelic on "Manipulative Player" by Broken Rose
- "A game of cat and mouse.. I now see what you mean. You have great expression of emotion and have tied your words with your feeling very well. I hope that this asshole 'Lee' gets what he deserves.. As from the beginning, he never deserved you.
Let him move on the his 'new lover' it won't be long before he hurts yet another.. Men like that just bring more pain than joy.
I truly hope you never leave us on Dark Poetry or those that love you in reality.. We all need you.. Without you this world would be a different place.. It would be a darker place.. So find someone to live for.. Find someone to love.. Find your voice and let it be heard. Because you have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "Welcome to the New Me" by Broken Rose
- "The feeling of emptiness and nothingness is something that you're not feeling alone.. Like myself, I see nothing important.. Why would anyone want me around? What importance is there to my life? Does anyone actually care? I ask myself these questions all the time.. Sometimes the answers I seek are more than I expected.. On one side there is emptiness and depression.. But on the other.. There is something amazing.. A girl.. A woman.. A woman that loves me no matter what.. Someone that is able to make me smile.. Make me laugh.. Even when I don't want to. A woman I love.. The people around you that truly accept, that truly love and want you around will always be there for you.. You aren't nothing to them.. You're not nothing to us.. You may think that you're simply a voice.. An unheard voice with nothing going your way.. But we're all here.. Whether in reality or on this site.. We're hear to listen, support and encourage.. Because we're all family. After reading this, your image of yourself may not change.. But trust me. There's someone's close isn't there..? Someone that you love..? Someone that loves you..? If that's the case then that proves that you're not nothing.. You're definently someone to him.. Someone that he loves most dearly and wants to spend his life with.. So live for him.. And he'll live for you.. Let him show you that you're not nothing.. That you're not a item.. But a woman.. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard.
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Posted by Unknown on "Nothing left but lonely tiredness" by Broken Rose
- "I can relate to this so much. I love the expression of the anger and rage. I felt like you were telling my tale, except mine doesn't rhyme with "Flea" :)"
Posted by Unknown on "Dam You" by Broken Rose
- "To let out your anger into words is a great way to get rid of unwanted stress. I'm glad to see that you're able to direct it fluently into your words and phrases. I hope the idiot finally gets what he deserves.. No one deserves to be cheated on and used. True love is precious.. Once you find it, do your best to not let go, as I'm certain that whoever the person is, if they are able to treat you like their goddess, they'll always be yours. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "Dam You" by Broken Rose
- "Ordinarily I don't pay any mind to poems that aren't freeverse but this was unbelievably wonderful. Your anger, frustration and rage echoed through this.Beautifully done."
Posted by Shikiryu on "Dam You" by Broken Rose
- "Another great write! It comes to show that trusting someone can be very difficult. And this work shows it. I see it as a double message. Its bad for him because he was trusted. But, now he can see the darkness he created in the other person who wants revenge. Nice."
Posted by Unknown on "The Chess Game Begins" by Broken Rose
- "Love this piece. It's very sensual and it delivers a great message. That one moment can change a persons life. Being able to give that up to another person can be hard. Trust is key from both. Excellent! "
Posted by Unknown on "Love of the Pure and Corrupted" by Broken Rose
- "Depression can be a very dark place to be in. Sometime's for some people, having someone to talk to is the best medicine. I emersed myself in this and I feel the sadness. Great write! And keep your chin up!"
Posted by Unknown on "Enough Is Enough" by Broken Rose
- "Falling into the bottomless abyss... Shrouded in darkness with no hope for escape. Not even the brightest of those are able to shine a sliver of light your way.. Yes.. I know this feeling all too well.. Your emotions creep up on you when you wish they wouldn't and you're left sitting all alone, shrouded in a cloud of blackout mist.. As you walk through this mist.. You could even say a tunnel, you call for help but all you receive is the echos of your call. This feeling of being alone and trapped in your own world of pain.. It's not a nice feeling to tell you that, but trust me.. No matter how dark it is, no matter how thick the fog, there will always be a light.. A flame.. Someone that will put everything on the line to drag you out and give you the chance you deserve and desire.. You want to smile again..? Then find someone to smile for.. And smile.. Smile like there's no tomorrow and show your inner demons that you are a fighter and you will not give into the darkness.. Because you have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "Enough Is Enough" by Broken Rose
- "To trust someone with such importance.. How strange yet courageous. Your innocence to be taken away? That's a huge step in a relationship and I'm sure that this man will feel privileged to be yours for eternity and be your first. Love is a strange feeling.. So hold him close and don't let go.. As I'm sure we will do the same. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "Love of the Pure and Corrupted" by Broken Rose
- "A United family to love and support can bring many things.. Happiness.. Memories.. A life to live and love living. As members of a family are added one by one, a family will become stronger. Family brings those around you closer and gives hope to life. These are the good aspects of family.. And though I tend to seek out the darkness, this gives hope and a sweet smile to my face. Whatever you do now, whatever you may do in the future.. Enjoy and cherish the memories it brings with it. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "Sweet Family Dreams" by Broken Rose
- "I agree with Tormented_Mind, moving on is hard. There are times that I think that I'm finally over someone, just to dream of them. From experience, some wounds don't ever seem to heal. You write well and very expressive"
Posted by rwb35 on "Give me back my heart" by Broken Rose
- "In the hardest parts of life, moving on from one you love dearest is the most different and difficult endeavour one experiences. Take the time you need.. Take back what is yours. The person that you have fallen for will surely wait for your heart.. And in saying so, will surely help you rebuild your damaged heart.
You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard."
Posted by Unknown on "Give me back my heart" by Broken Rose
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Depicting life as a game of chess.. Ingenious. I do applaud you for this work. I do hope you reclaim what is rightfully yours and you are able to move on from that past. You have a voice that deserves to be heard, so let it be heard.
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Posted by Unknown on "The Chess Game Begins" by Broken Rose
