Comments by All Members
- "your ideas are so vivid and different. it is so good to find writers like this. when i need some inspiration. i know where to go."To sapphires and cold linoleum taunting me
Adorning velvet fingertips and curves"
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Posted by Twilight on "Ephedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "'where i indulge your inner saphires
and follow you down stair cases that wind endlessly' i like the feeling of infinity... smooth coffee jazz rhythm; well done ..."
Posted by Unknown on "Ephedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "i have read this at least five times and every time i still love it. beautiful imagery and emotion. awesome :-)"
Posted by Unknown on "Dexedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "vrey nice indeed... I particularly like the coldness of "i awoke to being awake
to find day old coffee and cold linoleum" and agree with purr - "inner sapphires" is indeed lovely. Fox
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Posted by flying_fox on "Ephedrine" by Mute Serenade
- ""And I become The snow screen that's left When the tape stopped playing." Awsome lines in an overall awsome write. Rollercoasters like you describe are always an emotional ride for better or worse. Awsome write. ~Ship!
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Posted by Unknown on "Dexedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "maybe you would blink a moment longer ... changes eveything ... the moment longer ... we are readable beasts ... so subtly assurred ... cool stuff ... floodmaster
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Posted by capt_funguy on "Icicle" by Mute Serenade
- "_holy shit...all of your wonderful imagery really sucked me into this.totally...the last stanza was genius...and the last line...god, do i know how that feels...this was truly powerful.-tim"
Posted by suicideseason on "Dexedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "chest " there it is ... the snapshot , the words become the visual ... speaking without talking ... really excellent ....do me a favor and send your postcard in .... if you left , i'd be losing a buddy ... The Floodmaster of Greasy Lake"
Posted by capt_funguy on "In the works (i'll finish it one day)" by Mute Serenade
- "psssssssst ! .. you know what ? .......
this is really fucking good ..ssshhhhhhhhh ! i don't want anyone else to find this ... this way , it's like half mine .... can't explain the lack of comments on this ... "and can't help but pull them to my che"
Posted by capt_funguy on "In the works (i'll finish it one day)" by Mute Serenade
- "wimpering mousy equations --- incredible .. snow screen , old lady lipstick , crumpled paranoia ... killer . love getting caught immobilized in front of your train of thought .. funguy"
Posted by capt_funguy on "Dexedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "OoOoh Wow, I love this. There's a truth to it that really struck me. Great title too. : ) ~Wish Upon A Star"
Posted by Unknown on "Dexedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "This is so good, except for the second to last verse. Just my opinion. Even though, this is going on my favorites. I love the twisted usage of words. - U.P. "
Posted by Unknown on "Dexedrine" by Mute Serenade
- "captain is right about the rhyme patterns. and some of your thoughts are very original. the highest of complments. well done."
Posted by Twilight on "Laugh or Die" by Mute Serenade
- "damn auto log-outs! well, you've salvaged very nicely, anyway, i think! strong metre, and i really like the "Throw your life away, my dear
We share this chorus every year" couplet. purr"
Posted by purr_verse on "Laugh or Die" by Mute Serenade
- "being in the spot light will give many acquaintences, more enemies and less friends...i don't think many would pity but the downfalls of one are remember most than anything+Fallen One+"
Posted by The Fallen Angel on "Plaster Casts." by Mute Serenade
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