Comments by All Members
- "That was an emotion filled journey! So self deprecatory and sad "Feeling that i will stain the beautiful stars"
Powerful and tragically beautiful..."
Posted by Solace on "Without You" by Anybody_Killette
- "I like the way you used shorter lines.. it makes the poem read faster. I dont know if you meant it.. but that fast rythem makes you sound mad.. maybe yelling.. i like it"
Posted by Quovis on "Without You" by Anybody_Killette
- "This one has an interesting rhythym... it starts off slow, then picks up speed. Good stuff :) I like your use of repetition, too, it's original - keep it up!"
Posted by stormtalk on "Without You" by Anybody_Killette
- "This poem reminds me of one a I read a few days ago - same idea, that nobody stops to think about anyone else... and it's a damn good idea. Keep having them!"
Posted by stormtalk on "Feelings.." by Anybody_Killette
- ""A thousand tears have been shed/A million stories untold" - kind of borderline cliches. Poetry is the one store where larger numbers usually have less value ;) "Ever stop and wonder/If he has old scars/from battle wounds" - awesome thought."
Posted by stormtalk on "Feelings.." by Anybody_Killette
- "Haha, this is fucking great. It's a fun read, and I think it's your best yet. My one criticism is that the end seems to trail off, whereas I think the poem would be the better for it if it ended with a punch. Either way, rock on!"
Posted by stormtalk on "Gothic Cinderella" by Anybody_Killette
- "I like this one... and I've written things in the same style before, as well. I've found that the rhymes tend to make ideas seem forced, and that these work well for humorous poems, but conveying a clear idea through ABAB structure can be difficult."
Posted by stormtalk on "Carnage" by Anybody_Killette
- "when im unhappy, i can only remember bad memories and i think thats all i have, when im happy, i can only remember happy memories, and i think im god :)"
Posted by Daemonicus on "Fading.." by Anybody_Killette
- "..memories aren't always pleasant.i think we all tend to hang on to issues that we would be better to just let go of.very nice.~tim"
Posted by suicideseason on "Fading.." by Anybody_Killette
- "oh wow! unexpected... reading the first stanza i thought "interesting", by the second, "hey this is really neat"... by the third, wow, how wonderful. i really like the metaphor here, unique"
Posted by Daemonicus on "My Little Star" by Anybody_Killette
- "This is really amazing, the very act of carving something into your heart because of feelings for someone else. Amazing. <3 "
Posted by Stellar on "Carve" by Anybody_Killette
- "that sense of longing for the someone who will look past the darkness for the love is precious. never let the hope die... but there is ONLY ONE who can sastify that longing."
Posted by Unknown on "Beyond.." by Anybody_Killette
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