Comments by All Members
- "so many lessons here.... I think I may be partial to this one "it could take years to earn somebody?s confidence
And only a few seconds to lose it" but only for the moment..... thanks for sharing...."
Posted by Unknown on "I have learned" by PoisonInk
- "i concur with evangeline. Good poem though. held my attention, Your rhyming scheme is for the most part very lyrical. Some parts are clunky, but then, as Evangeline said, proofreading can fix that. Good write all in all."
Posted by Unknown on "Crazy forest" by PoisonInk
- "There are a few typos within the piece that need fixing because they take away from the overall effect, which is very ethereal and harsh at the same time. It's a great piece that will be even better when you proofread it more effectively. "
Posted by Amaryllis on "Crazy forest" by PoisonInk
- "Grate piece!!! And the title is just as captivating and your work . Well done"
Posted by XOCHITL on "Unwords" by PoisonInk
- "This was amazing. Its great. The imagery in this when you read it is. . .unbelievable. Thanks for sharing:)
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Posted by Ladyhawke on "Unwords" by PoisonInk
- "aletheia....... such is the removing of the veil.... the dis.covering of all that bleeds before me.... so many wondrous images here.... so richly laden with antiquated meanings and whispers that leap from pages of books long since discarded, long since buried in languages that no longer call with the birds..... gorgeous read. Maybe we should not look back? "
Posted by Unknown on "Lot" by PoisonInk
- "mmmm quite a vision here... so tangibly developed... is there faith in unwords.... is there an undoing that cannot be undone... when the blood of abraded finger tips punctuates the thoughts that cannot be but written... that cannot be but codified in the name of the fallen world. there is tenacity here in this absence of the lion and bull.... but something takes flight.... this soars. Thank you for sharing."
Posted by Unknown on "Unwords" by PoisonInk
- "There are many brilliant words here, just one example, "you haven't cleaned their dusty wings,
but scolded them instead-cruelly plucking their feathers
and bedizened in them"
It sounds especially strong due to imitation of the scriptures style.
I found this writing outstanding.
Thank you,
Pavel
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Posted by Unknown on "Lot" by PoisonInk
- "Wow! i havent heard the tale of Lot told quite like this before!!! very vivid visuals ... thanks for the view!"
Posted by Opklot on "Lot" by PoisonInk
- "such a winding rhyme..... like spiral stairs.... layers that lead down... well structured and smoothly developed. Thank you..... for sharing... and staying."
Posted by Unknown on "In solitude" by PoisonInk
- "This is exceptional. I didn't like the first two lines of the second stanza, takes away from the tone of the work a little. A bit choppy in places, but otherwise still worth a second chewing. +tpu+"
Posted by TheProphetUntold on "In solitude" by PoisonInk
- "this was a refreshing read, i love the tone here, somewhat longing and a bit of regret. i too was struck by the line how to leave and return. welcome to dp, cant wait to read more"
Posted by Unknown on "A letter from home" by PoisonInk
- "what an interesting read, with so much subtly (or not, to some) hidden beneath that often skimmed top layer. How to leave and return indeed..."
Posted by Sketso on "A letter from home" by PoisonInk
- "I found a depth to this narrative, this poem so free in verse .... stumbling as it were upon something that lends itself to the absurdity of living... a process of loss in the midst of gain and vice versa... are we not always already waiting to meet that which we have always already known and not known... to find at our feet what we dropped so long ago... this is full of wonderful holes for me to stick my proverbial head in.... and hide like a flightless bird... from the truth that beckons behind these words.... a paradox no doubt. Welcome to the Valley, do stay."
Posted by Unknown on "A letter from home" by PoisonInk
