Comments by All Members
- "Just some more friendly advice.. Run your pieces through a spell check to keep the read smooth. Also, I suggest summarizing works like this one into a more concise piece. It will help eliminate any unnecessary verbage. Keep writing!"
Posted by Midnight Phoenix on "family" by Leerer Blick Fairy
- "I'll be honest. I think your work could be greatly improved upon. Try avoiding cliches and overusing certain words. The piece is spontaneous, which isn't a bad thing, but in my opinion it could be more structured."
Posted by Midnight Phoenix on "Hate" by Leerer Blick Fairy
- "thank you i have thought about suicide alot (tried it once well i wasn't as much of trying to kill myself ass hurt myself) but my mom has no one but and w/out me she become depressed and kill herself."
Posted by Leerer Blick Fairy on "family" by Leerer Blick Fairy
- "Well I'm glad that suicide is not an option, it's just a cop out. in all this poem is emotionally stirring. I don't know the feelings, but you portray them well enough for me to guess"
Posted by SageoPhoneus on "family" by Leerer Blick Fairy
- ""Someone that had no judgment of me yet knew me well.
Someone to understand. Someone to love me"- I know the feeling hold your head up, very expressive write"
Posted by Unknown on "Hate" by Leerer Blick Fairy
