Comments by All Members
- "you're not alone although it may feel that way, and by reaching out with ur poetry, u have made ur self a part of a big family that understands u. nively done"
Posted by natalie on "Forever I'm Broken" by Deaths Apostle
- "Definatley someone you need to distant yourself from. When one lies like this, it's like breathing they need to, to survive they become a lie in its entirety. Great write and keep up the good work, take care though =)"
Posted by Gray Vision on "Lies" by Deaths Apostle
- "this speaks to me on one level... but it doesn't speak to me on multiple levels. While I can relate to what you express... the manner in which it is expressed does not capture my attention as much as it could.... just my opinion, of course."
Posted by Unknown on "Doubt" by Deaths Apostle
- "In the beginning I was expecting it to end somewhat tragic. However, you definitely surprised me with the ending. Saying that your love was only being taken from you and then to end with you still have her...hmm. It just makes me wonder if you're afraid of her being taken from you. Are you already expecting it? And yet..you have hope that she will always be there. Nice write. I like the structure."
Posted by Rowan on "Hope" by Deaths Apostle
- "Intense in every way. The pace of desperation quickens through to the end. It was like a morbid reflection with a twist. I truly enjoyed this. =)"
Posted by Unknown on "Ural" by Deaths Apostle
- "It is hard letting people love us. It makes us vulneable, even more so if we love them back. Killing the source of the often times painful emotion of love seems like a natural instinct at times. But, allowing the root of love to take hold in the soil of your soul can also be irreversible. This piece does a good job portaying the battle our heart can sometimes wage. I like it, good work.---Draven.
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Posted by Unknown on "Ural" by Deaths Apostle
- "I like the overall development, the pace is a little quick for me, but maybe that's the hangover thinkin. Ya know, anymore, I'd like to get to know the personas involved.... maybe some well placed thick descriptors... but then, that may make it less of a poem and more of a story. Anyway. I like the concept very much... there's a twistedness that seems incorrigible, and absolute, and does not love steal one's soul? Well conceived, good work, the meter is crisp, very measured and cleanly structured, the rhyme not overbearing but ushering along. Still I feel like I need to be drawn into the situ more.... be well and thanks."
Posted by Unknown on "Ural" by Deaths Apostle
- "i feel the pain of this peice. i have been in a similar situation and ur words ripped open that very scar. thank you for this beautiful and moving peice. u are very talented"
Posted by Unknown on "My Dearest Love" by Deaths Apostle
- "Beautiful poem. Sad when love changes, hurts when it burns to the ground. Great expression. =)"
Posted by Unknown on "Burn" by Deaths Apostle
- "Those three lines if looked at as I wrote, the death smells like decay, which is then burnt, leaving ashes, but still smells like decay, so it causes one to vomit...I suppose I shall clarify it a little better..Thanks for the comment
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Posted by Deaths Apostle on "Untitled(Part II)" by Deaths Apostle
- "Great thought, dark visuals galore... A perfect last line to cap off a fine piece... in the 2nd verse could you explain the last 3 lines... Thanks for the write. "
Posted by Malcholm Dark on "Untitled(Part II)" by Deaths Apostle
- "can't say I know the tune, but these sound like lyrics. I like the slow development, the repetition, the pace or tempo of the words. Soft, yet apocalyptic. "
Posted by Unknown on "Burn" by Deaths Apostle
- "That was a dark and well done piece. the flow was good. You may have left out a word in the 2nd verse. I enjoyed the write, thanks."
Posted by Malcholm Dark on "Burn" by Deaths Apostle
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