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- "well thank you for the feedback! The title was orginally 'unfurnished pleas' and then I wanted to play around with the whole theme of imperfections, which is interwoven throughout the write. I was going to mispell unfurnished and pleas, however it just didn't feel right. So Unfunfurnished relating to imperfect, and Please (sounding like 'pleas')) referring to the acceptance and love within the imperfections. Hope that made sense :)"
Posted by surething on "Un furnished Please" by surething
- "I felt this poem cling to my lungs and stay with me the whole night. To read what you write of insecurity involved with embracing love is so ironic; The limn of your mind articulated transforms these catalyst characteristics into something that deserve anyone's love and assimilation.
I stand humbled in your presence of mind and body and will cling to my desire for your hand as your words clung to the deepest depths of myself. Yet you make me breathe easier. What a magnificent soul you wield."
Posted by ALBATROSS on "Un furnished Please" by surething
- "usually, such short lines create a sense of stop and go interruption, stutters of a sort, but this was one rhythmic ride... right up to the point where abrupt disconnection was intended. Also, the play with the line-up, so to speak, creating visuals (curves and such) was fair near amazing! Quite the nice touch and read."
Posted by Sketso on "Un furnished Please" by surething
- "like a bloody aphrodiasic, so many tantalising phrasings and thoughts; juices dripping wild in this one, loaded with exotic feel and passionate proclamations....absolutely exquiste read from you, once more...super poetry"
Posted by The Zebra Warrior on "Un furnished Please" by surething
- "A smattering of false metaphors and climactic troughs - self fulfilling collapse, stagnant fervor, acceptable mediocrity, top dollar second rate - Such human (natural) imagery, that feeling of (natural) depression with the glimmer of knowing you're more than what you see. Great piece o'writing."
Posted by Aleas on "Completely Within My Reach" by surething
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