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- "..yeah but they follow behind...........that's what vultures do to survive......it's like being in a war on the front line while the pussy's cower way behind criticizing the hero's because of envy."
Posted by elisa on "SCENE KIDS" by Possesion
- "I know, it just crawls rightu nder my skin. makes me say " Grrr " and grit my teeth and walk on. "
Posted by Possesion on "SCENE KIDS" by Possesion
- "i would need to borrow hands to count how many times i've thought the same thing....it's beyond insulting to read fabricated emotions of shit that i've actually lived by some attention whore that thinks misery is beautiful........from a distance."
Posted by elisa on "SCENE KIDS" by Possesion
- "Wonderful write. Your title says "Needs Work", but in my opinion, this is great the way it is. There are so many lines in here that stole my breath away, I can't even list just one. Awesome job-I can relate (perhaps a little too well...) *Evangel*"
Posted by Unknown on ".end" by Possesion
- "...i think either shorten them or put them in one group... perhaps a bunch of longer sentences as time slows down at the moment of capture/death..."
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Hell Hounds" by Possesion
- "...i think it can be even better, however... more work can be done on the flow of it. There are several long sentences in amongst the short bursts of fear and pain... "
Posted by TheBardOfBlasphemy on "Hell Hounds" by Possesion
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