The Plucked Moth

By nur hidayah

Amid its trembling
flight on sun-singed wing
I slipped out my tongue
for its safe landing.

Soft shavings of outer space black
were cried across a punctured lung
It fluttered angry 'neath my breast
my quiet hero moth unsung

Within me
ice pillows floating
drunken soul river
your feather ink head
will slumber darling
for tonight
for ever.

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© 2007 Nuri
Published on Wednesday, February 28, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Graceful, yet leaves a puncture wound, nur hidaya. Just a great natural view. Love the "hero moth". I've read this numerous times! Thank you! :)

  • jonLyndon On Friday, September 3, 2010, jonLyndon (113)By person wrote:

    "drunken soul river / your feather ink head" the words, the flow, the imagery, the structure all plucked perfectly (pun intended). I love the overall feel, the natural rhythm & soft rhyme. The image in the intro stanza is particularly nice, even sensual almost possibly allegorical(?). All plucked moths should live in a perfect plucked poem; well done.

  • A former member wrote: Whoops! Did i say 'sensual'? -i mean to say 'sensuous' *digs bigger hole* -I only ever meant well -i promise!

  • Nixx On Tuesday, March 24, 2009, Nixx (233)By person wrote:

    lol

  • A former member wrote: fairest of play! I can only blush dear lady! Should've know by the soft and sensual tone of your words!!!

  • A former member wrote: This poem is wonderful -to be so emotive in so few words is an achievement in itself -your imagery is soft and dreamy -I applaud you sir..

  • nur hidayah On Tuesday, March 20, 2007, nur hidayah (117)By person wrote:

    Thank you, raskal. The only trouble is, kind commentor, I am a lady, not a sir. =)

  • The Zebra Warrior On Tuesday, March 20, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (1530)By person wrote:

    oh hehehe....I must confess I also thought you male, how terrible is this....well, you're having quite the effect......... madam, respect :)

  • A former member wrote: the day i started reading you was one of my best. you're fucking outstanding.

  • A former member wrote: dreamy...this was superb

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