redemption

By lajeeves

I once knew a girl who hated herself
she blotted the sunlight brick by brick
and the wall she built to keep them out
could've been her prison to this day still

and I once knew a guy stayed locked up inside
he ran from love hit by hit
the wall he built to save him from pain
was a prison of his own will

now both of them lived behind their wall
and longed each day for some kinda help
not knowing all the while the answers they seek
lie deep within their own selves

then one day this girl let down her wall
to be hurt again it seemed
but the guy I mentioned let down his wall too
and as lovers they were redeemed

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© 2007 lajeeves
Published on Thursday, February 8, 2007.     Filed under: "Philosophical" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: I loved the ending so much the meanings and your wording were great

  • Phalanx On Tuesday, November 3, 2009, Phalanx (628)By person wrote:

    I really appreciate this work. Thank you for reminding me of what hope looks like. Sometimes I can't see it.

  • Nixx On Monday, February 18, 2008, Nixx (235)By person wrote:

    hopefull ending but it doesnt always happen that way. nice write

  • Taunting The Reaper On Monday, February 18, 2008, Taunting The Reaper (169)By person wrote:

    I'm going to echo the same comment about fairytale endings. They're beautiful in much the same way your poem is. Thanks for sharing.

  • bpathos On Wednesday, January 23, 2008, bpathos (77)By person wrote:

    This would make a good story book tale. Let me know if you need illustrations... I loved it. Wish it would go on...

  • A former member wrote: I've heard that story before... and (in my case) also had a happy ending. Very enjoyable =)

  • A former member wrote: this was lovely.the end, endearing

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