Fishing muted sighs
By Rebel_not_Radical
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The invisible eye
Looked from the stars
And he saw
Tiny little specks
Cast lines like
Shooting webs from
Their soul spinnerets
Between the stars and waves
Shimmering like sea-salt ice cream
Unfazed and sweating in
The cool breeze of the silver moon
Hard labor beating on
Their back and brows
-and he descended to talk to one of them-
-but instead he just began to listen-
(Old fisherman leaning by the cold wind
not knowingly talking to someone real)
"Hey bud, sometimes i really dont know why i fish"
"Maybe because i fish for my past or the fires of my youth"
"I know it doesnt really put food in my stomach"
"Nor put money in my pockets"
"But i guess it keeps me warm at night"
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"Poverty is like punishment for a crime you didn't commit.
And one never really forgets either ---
everything serves as a constant reminder of it."
~ Eli Khamarov
Comments on "Fishing muted sighs"
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A former member wrote:
Ingenious!
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A former member wrote:
Damn, Im not used to poetry like this on Dark Poetry. It actually had a moral, and was writtin for a purpose and not just out of feeling. I was turned upsidedown by this. Highly Respected by me ][ ][
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On Monday, October 30, 2006, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
Hits straight through my working class heart. Fantastic write from an original angle.
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On Monday, October 30, 2006, verablue
(106) wrote:
wonderfully original!
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A former member wrote:
what i love about you, is that you always tackle subjects i rarely see done around here..your so unique in your style, your voice, your images..this was such a breath of fresh air.
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A former member wrote:
that opening stanza was like silk on honey..so smooth and lovely.."Shimmering like sea-salt ice cream"..that rolled off the tongue perfectly. the dialogue made this complete. fascinating write, tetchy.
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On Monday, October 30, 2006, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
Tetch, your kind heart is rare and this piece shows it! I loved every word! And it's true... so true! Awesome quote at the end also. Well done. Julia~