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My World
By Muses_Love
my mind wonders
as my world falls apart
i look into the mirror of time
all the beautiful colors fade to grey
i blink...no change
rub my eyes...nothing
i stare into the void of my own reality
a sweet furious grin of boredom in my soul
my job is of no more
spent is my money
all i have is my honey
all this time has passed
as i come to realize
what ive always known
color starts to come back now
she IS my world
colorful and beautiful, peaceful, perfect
she is all i will ever need
when she moves in with me
support her i must
its time now
a once dusty resume is now blown off
used it shall be once more
to give us hope of a better life
applied i am
waiting now
waiting for a call of hope
the begining of this one sounds a lot like the first one i posted i know
but i have revised this one from its original just completed a couple hours
ago. and on the first one i will probably lose the first three lines to
use elsewhere and to keep the beginings of these two from being so alike.
please comment on this one opinions and suggestions greatly appreciated
good or bad
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© 2006 Muses_Love
Published on Sunday, September 10, 2006.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
Comments on "My World"
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On Sunday, September 18, 2011, thecitymorgue
(38)
wrote:
expressed so much emotion. good poem. keep writing!
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On Tuesday, September 12, 2006, Muses_Love
(6) wrote:
thanks all for the wonderful comments!
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On Tuesday, September 12, 2006, Muses_Love
(6) wrote:
some deep passion? more like more than anyone could ever imagine! guess i just havent gotton used to writting again. then again maybe i lost my tallent over the years. ohwell ive got more important things to worry about i guess, though i do miss it. well
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On Sunday, September 10, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(222) wrote:
honestly speaking, what you're trying to say is beautiful, but I feel it being drowned out by the lack of emotion in your words? Then again, I'm writing this at a queer hour and my mind is most likely completely off it's rocker, but that's my honest opini
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On Sunday, September 10, 2006, Muses_Love
(6) wrote:
thank you shards. yeah it may be a little dull i feel i havent gotton used to this writing thing again yet. any help u might be able to offer me would be great, thanks.
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On Sunday, September 10, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(222) wrote:
it's just all about trial & error + practice
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On Sunday, September 10, 2006, The Zebra Warrior
(1521) wrote:
yep..it is
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On Sunday, September 10, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(222) wrote:
opinion :)
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