Marks

Her fingertips leave marks
in the sand, the beach deserted
and cold, as if winter
could last forever.
I guess she ruined the summer
[for me]

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Published on Monday, August 28, 2006. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Marks"

A former member wrote: My spine shuddered. Very wicked, nice.
A former member wrote: a perfect imprint of pain.
A former member wrote: it's the "as if" that draws me in to this... I mean, does she leave marks in the sand, like clawing to get out because winter could last forever? or is the beach deserted and cold... as dead as forever? or maybe the as if winter could last forever is comm
A former member wrote: commentary on her marks in the sand... somehow looking back on her making of marks as if it were foolish... the marks will not last, the beach will not be deserted forever... hmmmm the "as if" as wonderfully vague and enticing as an "as if" could be... ni
A former member wrote: nice work... got bite.