Snowflakes Melted In Your Eyes And I Died Inside
By Fading_Smile
Ok, so lately I keep wanting to write something set in Winter in the middle
of Summer, its refreshing to me.
You screamed an
Ava
Lan
Che
Icecicles to my evergreen heart
l l l
Snowflakes melted in your eyes
And ran into the valley of your
Blouse for a season or two
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My laughter was the glacier uuuuuuuu
That sunk your titanic smile uuuuuuuuu
The aura of your saddened
Hypothermia burned white,
And your wailing was
^x^ ^x^ ^x^ ^x^ ^x^
Frozen blades of grass
^x^ ^x^ ^x^ ^x^ ^x^
Slicing my conscience
I watched as trees wept away their every leaf
The fire went from your eyes ^^^^^^^^^^
To your soul, and I watched you ^^^^^^^^^^^^
Blow smoke signals with each whimpering breath
Guilt weighed down on me like snow in every branch
It was all I could do
To roll you a snowball _ _ _ _ _ O
And mutter a frostbitten
"Im sorry,
But every snowman melts at Winter's end"
With that,
I sledded away
into depression
and regret ___)
Comments on "Snowflakes Melted In Your Eyes And I Died Inside"
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A former member wrote:
at the beginning of spring and your giving me shivers with the depth of your words. i really like the ending! a twist that was sad and sweet. thank you for the wonderful post you've shared.
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On Wednesday, July 19, 2006, mywristshurt
(405) wrote:
well, it was... i wish i could say fantastic, but it was okay for me.. i know you could do better.. somehow, for you, i would change it up a bit.. thats only my opinion.. otherwise, it was okay
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On Wednesday, July 19, 2006, sIo
(898) wrote:
quite crushing to me.
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On Monday, July 17, 2006, TaintedButterfly
(653) wrote:
I love the giddyness and happy parts of this poem. The fun you were having...but at the end sadness. You my dear, are most definitely a talented writer. Great job hun! Julia~
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A former member wrote:
Magical, though morose. I can't wash this sinking feeling. Beautiful imagery. A pleasure to read, as always. Thank you.
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A former member wrote:
The image i got from this work is amazing, just the use of words and the way they compliment others, amazing. Good write