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remember
By coly
tears streem down my face
every time I hear your name
every time I remeber your dead
every time the memorie plays again,
why couldnt I have saved you
why couldnt I have taken youre place
when the door flew open how did you fall out
when I dream of you little sister
I dream of you lying in a puddle of blood
you were instantly dead at only three
im sorry but I dont remeber anything about you
except for death
to you I cherish always and forever
with love youre big sister
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© 2005 coly
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A former member wrote:
'Tis depressing, the tragedy of death. Though comfort sometimes seems like letters in some random order, I truly am sorry for your loss.
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A former member wrote:
coly..this was powerful. you are lovely, dear. *hugs*
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On Tuesday, November 29, 2005, JiNx
(98)
wrote:
oh thats so sad. My eyes are all teary. Depressingly well written write..
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On Wednesday, November 23, 2005, DoctorAsh
(373) wrote:
Its hard to find a sentence that places substance to what has happened in this write. All I know is that what you are is a hella of a lot more important then what you want yourself to be. Much respect Coly. Daniel
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A former member wrote:
Now that poem just took my heart and pulled it out. Wow, great writing, the feeling is felt by the time you reach the center of the second verse! Breath taking poem I'd say!
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A former member wrote:
This is the most heartwrenching poem I've ever read.
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On Thursday, November 17, 2005, Johny_D_Lewis
(467) wrote:
maybe it's better not to have known her better, then again how should i know, well written
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On Wednesday, November 16, 2005, Army Barbie
(324) wrote:
Damn sad story. I'm sorry for you. Memory* =) Just trying to help.
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On Wednesday, November 16, 2005, coly
(54) wrote:
i lost my sister when i was four this is to her with love
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A former member wrote:
hmmmmm... that's weird... anyway, i really like this one. the form is great and i can really feel your emotion. the spelling is getting better. did you just write this? it is great. i really like it alot. ((((((((((coly))))))))))
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