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DARKNESS...
By Zhee
(this is a really old one....from my early teenage years)
In the depths of this darkness
I can clearly see,
The emptiness in your eyes -
The chaos in your sanity.
In this endless darkness
I hear your cracking shell,
I can touch the walls
Of your prison cell.
In the abyss of this darkness
I can feel your pain,
As you sit and measure
The length of your chain.
In this mute darkness
I hear your stifled rage,
While your voice lies broken
In its gilded cage.
In the shadows of this darkness
I see you sit and pray,
Trying to purge your soul
Of this infernal decay.
In this barren darkness
I witness your silent screams,
From the birth of your fears -
To the funeral of your dreams.
In the heart of this darkness
I feel your every breath,
I can touch your soul -
I can taste your death...
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Copyright 2004 Zheala
Published on Tuesday, September 14, 2004.
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Comments on "DARKNESS..."
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A former member wrote:
Wow...great piece so well written, though darkness envelopes but the again you'd able to show the real true nature of this piece, and that is the most important thing in poetry. I really like it, same field and I hope to read more from you...Thank you for sharing your art...
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A former member wrote:
Very well done at sticking to the rhyme scheme and the cadence was pretty wonderful too. Good job.
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On Thursday, October 21, 2004, Zahtsk
(26)
wrote:
I am going to have to differ alittle I love the last stanza yes. But I also love the third and fourth. and seocnd to last just as much as I love the last. This is a beautiful and unique piece
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On Monday, October 18, 2004, DarkWolf
(415) wrote:
I too love the last lines.. only I find them lovely and impassioned. Makes me think of my Wolf-Mate.. beautiful work. -Michael
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On Monday, October 18, 2004, DarkWolf
(415) wrote:
"From the birth of your fears - To the funeral of your dreams." That too, is an awesome line Zhee. -Michael
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On Friday, October 8, 2004, Angst Queen
(370) wrote:
"i can touch your soul, i can taste your death" chilling
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A former member wrote:
I never wrote anything like this in my teens. I am, however, thankful that you in fact did. ~Shane~
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A former member wrote:
All the world's indeed a stage, and we are merely players, performers and portrayers. Each another's audience inside a gilded cage. ~Shane~
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On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Dayer
(162) wrote:
I loved the ending as well, great job
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On Tuesday, September 14, 2004, Death
(28) wrote:
all I can say is that I really liked the last stanza
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