when the earth shakes & bottles break

By theBAC

edge of the world
stop & stare
no names on the list
of those who care

i have tears in my eyes
& a hole in my heart
i turn around
with my back to the edge
i want to see your face as i fall
i want to see you
see me smiling

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Copyright 2004 Brett Alan Coker
Published on Wednesday, August 25, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: eloquent anger, it's good-gina

  • Mari On Sunday, April 30, 2006, Mari (419)By person wrote:

    everything you write is amazing.

  • Northstar On Thursday, August 26, 2004, Northstar (374)By person wrote:

    I definitely love the ending --nicely done--simple, direct and clear

  • Anth On Thursday, August 26, 2004, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    a brilliant poem,empowering and deliberating,liked the concept and expression here

  • A former member wrote: i like this. killer. i really like the second stanza. the begging pulls you in.

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