TONGUE DIVIDE
By ariadne
kaleidoscope
guest upsets the cemented faction of chameleon beat
a
sustenance unreprimanded for over horse-shoed defeat
distinct lump
of unmitigated partition glances out towards unseat
and
meaningless intrepid, debut constenance repeat.
in tumult
caper disengage weather unsavoury, clean response
a
depiction of the outside, parleys timeliness ensconced
umbra
dressed uncertain, tackled lacklustre and respondent
amid
trailer and fetid mailer, similacralide savant
in
miracle open-shard and reverberating tense
sentences
limousine decidedly, and animosity makes sense
so long
in cummerbund, titled earth-watch whilst immense
this
simulcry of morality, ecstatic never hence.
in dreamlike
statue of curlicue, this mass maddens
and
inverse deep and tedium meek, iconoclast gladdens
drenched
too below and not enough, the self-obligatory saddens
and locusts as plagues,
redundancy decays, the self construed as imagined
discrepancy
lifts up a key, and self coagulates in rhyme
in
visioned sine, inner decision kind guides any under time
development
discussion starts seldom unuttered -
as
self-recognition fabricates in chime.
Comments on "TONGUE DIVIDE"
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On Saturday, July 17, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
I like this one very much - great rhythm and I love your word combinations, they created a psychedelic mental picture for me. Ciao, T/S
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On Saturday, July 17, 2004, aXe FactoR
(333) wrote:
the flow of this piece is maddening, perfectly written with beautifully spun words...-MeL-
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A former member wrote:
'kaleidoscope
guest upsets the cemented faction of chameleon beat ' Splendid rhythm w/ this opening line, and quite visual; 'umbra
dressed uncertain' Lovely uniqueness, like jazz the way you play your words synchopated & off-beat, giving division a di
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A former member wrote:
distinct attitude; self-indulgence in poetry at its best, truely. I love that you can use words to formulate a soundscape structure, even if i'm not sure what you mean. Sometimes the music is admired before the words are understood, as is this dancedpoem
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On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
thanks for commenting bakkus, because i wholeheartedly agree. this is what i'd call verbal ecstacy.. i believe this must go onto my favs--
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On Friday, March 5, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
what fun ... syllable by syllable decoding ... a true bed of wild flowers here ... welcome indeed ... funguy
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On Friday, March 5, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
Wow, an awesome write, flying_fox is right; magnificent work. Welcome to DP! :) ~L
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On Friday, March 5, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
yay! *dance* you're here, you're here...and as such any comment i leave is going to look horribly biased... but that does not change the fact i think your worldwords are magnificent. :) purr
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On Friday, March 5, 2004, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
*whines* purr.. I have to use a dictionary again :( In all seriousness, I'm glad you've joined this site. Seems like your work will be intelligent and just as perplexing as purr's :) Welcome. First stanza is my fav btw. :::OLd
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A former member wrote:
Cripes I know Old, I had to bust it out as well and I'm still confused but I still enjoy what I got out of it (which is usually something out in left field compared to what was intended). Welcome to DP:) ~Ship!
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On Thursday, March 4, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
what an honour to be the first to comment on such magnificent work. Great sharp rhythym and excellent, original rhyme. Kudos! FF